Severed keys of ivory’s song,
ebony hits eclipsing tune
Piano pedals, once danced strong,
tap hollow under tainted moon.
Isolated...
Show some love.
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WOW
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this is quite ghostly, has such a feeling of empiness. very well penned and discriptive.
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I'd like to hear that song
I would swoon to its meloncholy melody.
Sauntering to an out of tune score defines us both, and it never ceases to amaze me just how in tune we both are at random moments in time.
Like now for example.
Orchestrated with succinct brilliance brother.
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nocturne
I can almost hear this loud and clear...and feel the movements of the notes...
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A strong and powerful write...I felt the emptyness. Nicely done!!!
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~Powerful, I can feel the rain~
~Dearest Timothy~
Nobody does it better!
Your ability to express any feeling in
Verse and rhyme shines so fine,
The image of broken piano keys
The feeling of a broken heart
Lost under the moonlight.
~Exceptional Poem, A million kisses for sharing~
~All my love, Sharon~
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I like the font you use, but, in this case, so probably in others, it's almost difficult to see the space between 'under' and 'tainted'. Hardly important, but good to know, I'm sure.
In that picture, only one key makes me sad; the key that gave up.
I'm too busy thinking about isolation and the moon to comment on the poem, which shows that it's a thought provoking piece, which is always great.
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Oooh awesome piece in brevity here bro!!! Love the sullen undertone, and your words give the image life ... Great write!
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i know these thoughts all too well and with my own feelings of lost emptiness it makes me think of a facebook.yearbook type quiz i once took about would I be missed if I died and my result came up no. but that isnt why i have the isolated and empty thoughts of nothingness its just my life. you my dear are incredible and have so much more to sing of magical wonder for. well done and many blessings always xxxxxx love you xxxxx
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This is amazing!! What a great job! Kind of reminds me of something someone else and I were talking about, a long time ago. Just kinda hit me that way tonight. Great job!
and love
Nyetta
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Wow
Could hear the sound through your words like the piano song playing in a la rge banquet room. Beautiful. Blessings.
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wow, this is so very you. you find poetry in everything and what you found in this image inspired you to show the impact of isolation. this is priceless.
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Beautiful write and great use of metaphors in the poem. Especially the part of the moon and isolation. It seemed to give a lonely feeling to the poem. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.
Haley Mary
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Stunning write. Loved the imagery and metaphors.
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There is nothing so sad as a forgotten instrument. You have captured this in a beautiful way.
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Piano, and isolation, both have often hit me as very similar. I dont know why tho. This poem fascinated me, small and awesome! Wow your ideas never end baby!
Love always,
wifey
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Stirking the keys
that open the reader's heart,
the stark black and white,
with the crackling of neglect,
do indeed reveal isolation
Showing some love....
M-C
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a deep piece you penned here sweet soul.
wishin you the best
Love
Passions
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soft yet so bitterly alone.. such a beautiful yet sad write.... you really did a lovely job, best of luck in the contest baby boy..
Angel
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What a lonely piece... feeling as though there is nothing left and almost as though you could be the piano..
Best to you in the contest
Shari
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I love the concept of isolation you've used with the prompt.
Works very well!
Bravo!
Thank you, and good luck
♥ Kate
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Awesomeness poem here.
That font so works with it.
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so well done
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