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Isolated

Missing image

Severed keys of ivory’s song,

ebony hits eclipsing tune

Piano pedals, once danced strong,

tap hollow under tainted moon.

 

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  • Raivyn
    March 14
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    WOW

    Short and I love it... Love the picture too.

  • this is quite ghostly, has such a feeling of empiness. very well penned and discriptive.


  • 245Trioxin
    February 28

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    I'd like to hear that song

    I would swoon to its meloncholy melody.

    Sauntering to an out of tune score defines us both, and it never ceases to amaze me just how in tune we both are at random moments in time.

    Like now for example.

    Orchestrated with succinct brilliance brother.


  • estbelle gold member
    February 28
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    nocturne

    I can almost hear this loud and clear...and feel the movements of the notes...


  • nevadapoet
    February 27
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    A strong and powerful write...I felt the emptyness. Nicely done!!!


  • Sharon Corr gold member
    February 26

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    ~Powerful, I can feel the rain~

    ~Dearest Timothy~
    Nobody does it better!
    Your ability to express any feeling in
    Verse and rhyme shines so fine,
    The image of broken piano keys
    The feeling of a broken heart
    Lost under the moonlight.

    ~Exceptional Poem, A million kisses for sharing~
    ~All my love, Sharon~


  • DesolatELifE
    February 26

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    I like the font you use, but, in this case, so probably in others, it's almost difficult to see the space between 'under' and 'tainted'. Hardly important, but good to know, I'm sure.

    In that picture, only one key makes me sad; the key that gave up.

    I'm too busy thinking about isolation and the moon to comment on the poem, which shows that it's a thought provoking piece, which is always great.

  • Oooh awesome piece in brevity here bro!!! Love the sullen undertone, and your words give the image life ... Great write!


  • Stardust-luvr
    February 25

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    i know these thoughts all too well and with my own feelings of lost emptiness it makes me think of a facebook.yearbook type quiz i once took about would I be missed if I died and my result came up no. but that isnt why i have the isolated and empty thoughts of nothingness its just my life. you my dear are incredible and have so much more to sing of magical wonder for. well done and many blessings always xxxxxx love you xxxxx


  • StarEyes
    February 24

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    This is amazing!! What a great job! Kind of reminds me of something someone else and I were talking about, a long time ago. Just kinda hit me that way tonight. Great job!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Denerica
    February 24

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    Wow

    Could hear the sound through your words like the piano song playing in a la rge banquet room. Beautiful. Blessings.


  • queenie
    February 24

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    wow, this is so very you. you find poetry in everything and what you found in this image inspired you to show the impact of isolation. this is priceless.


  • HaleyMary
    February 24

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    Beautiful write and great use of metaphors in the poem. Especially the part of the moon and isolation. It seemed to give a lonely feeling to the poem. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.

    Haley Mary


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 24
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    Stunning write. Loved the imagery and metaphors.

  • LovingPhoenix
    February 24
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    There is nothing so sad as a forgotten instrument. You have captured this in a beautiful way.


  • Lonely
    February 24

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    Piano, and isolation, both have often hit me as very similar. I dont know why tho. This poem fascinated me, small and awesome! Wow your ideas never end baby!

    Love always,
    wifey


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    February 24

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    Stirking the keys
    that open the reader's heart,
    the stark black and white,
    with the crackling of neglect,
    do indeed reveal isolation

    Showing some love....


    M-C


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 23
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    a deep piece you penned here sweet soul.

    wishin you the best

    Love
    Passions


  • Angelflower
    February 23

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    soft yet so bitterly alone.. such a beautiful yet sad write.. .. you really did a lovely job, best of luck in the contest baby boy..


    Angel


  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    February 23

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    What a lonely piece... feeling as though there is nothing left and almost as though you could be the piano..

    Best to you in the contest
    Shari


  • Kathraina silver member
    February 23

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    I love the concept of isolation you've used with the prompt.
    Works very well!
    Bravo!
    Thank you, and good luck


    ♥ Kate


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 23
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    Awesomeness poem here.
    That font so works with it.


  • Luciferschild
    February 23
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    so well done

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