An elephant and kangaroo
Sailed out across the ocean blue
Across ten leagues and then a mile
They landed on a tropic isle
They met a tribe of Zoe-bu-lay
And asked them to come out and play
They frolicked all about in fun
As ‘round the island they did run
They played a game of hide-n-seek
The Zoe-bu-lay, they tried to peek
The kangaroo got in a crouch
So it could hide inside its pouch
The elephant was in a funk
And so he hid inside his trunk
The Zoe-bu-lay looked high and low
And wondered where the two did go
They couldn’t find a hide or hair
Of either of the hidden pair
So finally the game did end
The kangaroo looked for his friend
He found the trunk and then he knocked
But sadly found the trunk was locked
The elephant was very blue
“Oh dear, oh dear what shall I do!”
The kangaroo thought for a while
His face then broke into a smile
He found a little friendly skunk
And placed it there beside the trunk
The odor there became so foul
The elephant let out a howl
He struggled so inside his snout
He finally turned it inside out
And that is why it’s known so well
The elephant’s trunk started to smell
The reason that I’ve come to know
The kangaroo he told me so
Please tell me what you think
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you are one silly silly funny rhyming man! hello my name is Lena and im a rhymaholic, would you like to join my group lol
I must say Dr. Suess has nothing on you 
huggles
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A wonderful lighthearted funny poem
Thank you for the wide smiles that your charming poem has installed. I adore Elephants, your poem has captured a heart, thank you.
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HA! A very funny poem for Poetry Planet!
Thank you so much for sharing your talent with many people who will smile when they read this fine poem! 
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This is a great one!!!
However the rules said 2-3 stanzas so it cannot be a winner here, but thanks for the great laugh!
Jeff
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WOW!!!
I'm only 11 so i may not now ALOT, but i thought that poems was a perfect write for children! You are very good you should publish some!!!
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Cute and creative write for children!
Good luck!
Hugs, Moon
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This was cute. And like Little Blue Bird said, it also sort of reminds me of a Dr. Suess story. You did an amazing job. keep it up
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Thanks for the laugh
I love it, my friend! Wonderful write. Wish I could give you 10 applause. I will bookmark this one. It reminds me of a Dr. Seuss story and also of the poetry collection, "Where the sidewalk ends". Keep up the awesome work!
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A bit weird
It's silly, but it is funny. And being for children, being read by my 7 year old..... all the college level critique is a bit out of place...
Sometimes poetry just sounds great to the ears and heart!!! We loved it!!!
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Well Steve...
....it's very rare for me to find anything to criticise about one of your pieces, but finally, after about 4 years, this is IT, so here we go....!
1) I've always hated the use of "do's" and "dids" in any form of poetry. I consider it a cop-out. There WILL be a way of avoiding them if you take the time and effort.
2) I found the flow a trifle forced in the penultimate and last stanzas.
3) Is "odor" spelled like that in the USA, or odour as in the UK?
4) I thought the story-line a little weak and not up to your usual standard. was this done in a hurry?
It's still worth a little clap though Steve lad.
Robin.
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great
Wonderful tale for children of all ages to enjoy.
Your usual creative genious at work! It's been awhile since I have been in here, and the first thing I see is your name and work pasted on top of the page!
Have a great day,
Moses
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