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Genghis Khan



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I dreamt last night that John died

I didn't know that he was a poet

or that he was in love with her

she who is in love with Genghis Khan
kissing him openly
he kissing her
like a horse slaking its thirst
having run the breadth of the steppes
to drink from the coolest
calmest
sweetest pool of water



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who mothered the man
       that would conquer half the world?

who held the weanling to her breast
       that would muster men and horses
              make them into armies
       and then make them ride behind him?

who gave him the teat
       when all she could expect in return
             was the joy of giving?

-and then set him free like a bird on the air



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imagine music

 

a sonata building

 

into a symphony

 

more than melancholy
-tempestuous foreboding
each note becomes the cadence of hoof-beats
hail upon iron
a symphony of percussion

out of the East
the music of storm-clouds
riding upon the pride of men and horses



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  • Celticmoon
    May 12
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    interesting and unique...

    i like it


  • lunarlunacy
    April 11
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    nicely crafted

  • Thank you thank you for this. What a poem! I'll never forget!

    s.sora


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    March 18

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    I'm so sorry Dogfish, I completely forgot about the word limit of the contest and this certainly exceeds it and then some...

    if it is any consolation, i think this is really good

    sorry i can't consider it in the contest though


    al


    • DogFish silver member
      March 19
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      Thanks for your kind words...sorry, I guess I got carried away!


  • rite
    March 7

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    The legend says that Temüjin (meaning iron worker) was born with a blood clot clinched in his fist, which is a sign that he was destined to become a great leader. The blood never parted from his hands. He was the diametric opposite of his mother who gave him life. In a restraint type of way the words in your poem seem to refer to the essence of the man. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care.

    • DogFish silver member
      June 24
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      Thanks for your pertanent thoughts. I'm writing more from hearsay about the legendary man than from any real knowledge.I'm sure epic poems about him sleep somewhere!


  • rbruce gold member
    March 7

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    A very creative piece of writing, gaining strength, as it progresses , as did Genghis Khan. Wonderful write.


  • just mercedes gold member
    February 24

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    Wonderful poem! I've seen it in embryo form, I think, I love what it is here.

    Most powerful for me is the final stanza, but I love this part, such an immediate, strong image -

    he kissing her
    like a horse slaking its thirst
    having run the breadth of the steppes
    to drink from the coolest
    calmest
    sweetest pool of water


  • afroqban
    February 23
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    very creative. im glad i came by to read this, i love it


  • Naughtygrlred
    February 23
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    hmmm, so much to wonder about this. I like it, nice flow.


  • Cannonsfire
    February 23

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    I'd never looked at Genghis Khan quite this way, but now you mention it, was his mother a decent woman? lol Seems all boys who want to take over the world have an Oedipus complex somewhere

    • DogFish silver member
      February 23
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      My daughter said: "You never hear about the mothers" But at one point they are the whole world- even for those who conquer the world!

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