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she was telling me how she put top loading detergent into a front loading machine

 

 

 

 

 

 




and how her life is a disaster of suds
overflowing their municipal limits
she hasn’t taken a proper
shower in
months


there’s never any time, can you believe it?


I nodded

and floated all day
on a white cloud 

of my life is better than hers

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I'm mean.

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  • decode
    March 13, 2009

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    you clever thing, you .
    I enjoyed this thoroughly.

    congrats on the shiny silver trophy.


  • HereComesTheSun
    February 24, 2009

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    i liked this and its sarcasm and feelings that seem like they are said by a immature child who someone stole there barbie doll. awesome work


  • bw43
    February 24, 2009
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    hmmm... well maybe you ARE a little mean.

    but poetically mean lol


  • Rowan gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    No, you're not mean, you're human. lol. Sometimes, it helps to put our own lives into perspective when someone elses is going to shite.
    I loved the way you used the prompt. Thanks for entering!

  • a n e s t h e s ia
    February 24, 2009
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    mean is good.


    Esc.ed MP.


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    February 24, 2009

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    No way are you mean. I like the subtle facetiousness in this A wonderfully penned piece as usual
    Best wishes in the contest.
    Gaylene


  • Cannonsfire
    February 23, 2009
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    lol I bet you like bubble baths too


  • fortyninereasons
    February 23, 2009

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    what a great piece you have penned.
    a little snippet of thoughts
    good luck in the contest

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