Come on girl, back it up against me,
you know you want to sit on me for a long ride.
Let me caress your bottom as you lean back against my chest,
feel you wiggle and squirm as you find the spot that’s just right.
I’ve always forgiven you for neglecting me in the nights that were so cold,
not a word of complaint when you let your friends sit on my lap
enjoying the thrill of a ride.
But this is too much to bare,
now you are bringing him here,
telling him to lean back against my chest,
as his bottom finds a nice place to rest,
preparing for a long ride.
Oh I can smell him,
smell you,
smell the other on the both of you.
You leave the other.
Bringing this stranger’s scent to me,
the newness, the freshness,
a hot ride with her,
what, a pity ride for me?
I may just be a car seat,
not many words to say.
I’ve thought about giving you hard lumps
to start your day.
But to do so I know I would soon see my end near,
chase you away from me,
chase you back to the one,
to the one that I fear.
So please girl,
back it up against me,
let me take you for a long ride.
Please tell me what you think
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Take You For a Ride - shimmer
"grab me" effect
I found that the repetition of a few of your words took away from this write for me, but other than that - wow! well done!
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Excellent rythym to this. Loved the story-telling here. At times it seemed the seat was jealous. Who would have thought? lol
Though I am curious because I feel the same as my Sis on this, weather this is a seat speaking of a girl or a feminine personality itself appears to be unclear, but as a reader you get both impressions.
Great start shimmer.
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Intriguing to say the least. Oh, the stories that a car seat can tell on the owner(s) it has... lolol... great take on the prompt but there were times when I was uncertain as to whether the seat was talking to a girl or was speaking from a feminine point of view.
Overall this is an great piece and thank you for entering the contest.
Your score will be sent to the challenge host.
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Hot and erotic written in a contemporary style. has a real rap feel to it. An excellent use of the prompt.
One line trips me 'what, a pity ride for me?' but that could just be me and the way I read.
Well done
Jem
Your score hase been sent to the challenge host
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You did a GREAT job! Well done on this excellent take on the prompt. You are going to do well! I am routing for you hunny bunny! Now I do not judge this season I can route for someone ... hugs and kisses.
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when i saw your name in the contest my first thought was that i am doomed.
thanks so much for the kind words
huggs and kisses you back
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So close, and yet so far.... oh, the frustration!
Well done! Good luck in the contest!
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Forgot to give you clappys
Bill
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Nothing worse than a car seat scorned Heheh You should of popped a spring on his ass Great take on the prompt
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lol, i wish i had thought of that to put in there.
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Very nice! ;-) This was a fun little ride, hehe.
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well bring it on baby lol
Well done here
as usual, hot as hell
Love
Passions
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thanks Passion, I wish you were participating as well as I always enjoy what you write.
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i enjoyed this piece.
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scoots in closer, sure why not, lets really give the judges something to talk about
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as we sit and nestle close
my eyes begin to wander
hidden beneath those clothes
is my shimmering rose
your cherry lips inviting me
to pleasures of delight
closer baby, let me see
the passion thats rising viciously
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Points to the person above,
She knows I can’t rhyme to save my soul
but for all the help she has given me
I am more than eager to pay this toll.
Scooting closer
up into her eyes I do stare,
shivers and quivers shakes me
at the dark passions I see burning there.
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lips heated, finds your sweet skin
hungrily I devour each blazing bud
hands remove the attire your in
and I feel the fire burning within
across your stomach, I work on south
oh your this womans ultimate sin
I long for your wine, filling my mouth,
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With hands trembling
I stroke each breast
drinking in the beauty
the rise and fall of your lovely chest.
A little nip
I so want to tease
A little bite
I am eager to please.
Sucking on your nips
my body grows weak
a mind of its own
my hand begins to roam
as I give your bud a little tweak.
Into your wetness my fingers want to take a dip,
your sweet juiciness I want to take a sip.
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