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the cliff of DARKness

standing on the edge of a cliff
plunging into DARKness
freefalling into a great wide open
fear no longer a factor
the unknown waits no more
time is just a frozen metaphor
life is deaths benefactor
proceeding to close a door that opens
providing light for the DARKness
after falling from the edge of a cliff





Author notes



loss of life: the cliff of DARKness prompt 2~ lose of a loved one. whether it be family, friends, bf/gf, anything.

poet: theDARK1





dedicated to the memory of (my step-mother)

Virginia 'Ginny' Lois Hamlet
August 2, 1931 ~ February 18, 2004

Services were held at the
Glenn Funeral Home Chapel
Owensboro, KY

Final Resting Place:
Poplar Grove Cemetery
McLean Co, Kentucky


Please accept my special thanks to everyone for sending me warm wishes and encouragement through email and/or here. I greatly appreciate it.

luvya,

DARK

PS: She was a GREAT Lady!



5. Death, suicide, depression and/or self harm.
Your experiences, views, thoughts.. or take on the character of someone else and write what you think their experiences, views, thoughts etc would be..


Written February 23rd, 2004

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  • KeeperOfTheNight
    April 25, 2006
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    it's well played , and intriguing


  • DancingRed
    April 20, 2006
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    I found that the start seemed to just state things, I'm not sure if you meant it to sound upfront and honest or it just happened that way. And I can't make up my mind if I love it or not.
    But it did make the last half and ending stand out. I particularly enjoyed the lines:
    "time is just a frozen metaphor
    life is deaths benefactor"
    Those lines were sensational and beaufifully poetic. I loved 'em.

    And a very special thank you for participating in my contest and correctly abiding by all the rules!

    DancingRed.


  • InnerMe
    February 6, 2006
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    astounding imagery in such a short poem,

    thank you for entering and great job!!!


    ~InnerMe


  • unknownfrailty
    August 15, 2004
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    I'm sure that she would have appreciated this. I'm sure that she would be touched. I'm sorry for your loss. I liked especially "Time is is just a frozen metaphor". For some reason that just shot out at me. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.


  • theDARK1 gold member
    March 23, 2004
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    frozentears, thanks for the comment, DARK

  • theDARK1 gold member
    March 23, 2004
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    theoneromeo, thank you so much for the nice comment, DARK


  • Ghost of a Siren
    March 23, 2004
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    This is very lovely, wonderful job.

  • TheOneRomeo
    February 28, 2004
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    A very nice poem for your grandma's memory.And who knows maybe she will take the place of your guardian angel from now on.Take care and good luck,
    Jake

  • theDARK1 gold member
    February 23, 2004
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    bertie, thank you so very much for the comment, DARK


  • Bertie
    February 23, 2004
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    A great tribute for a great lady Dark. I'm sure she's smiling down on you. God Bless you

    Hugs
    Bertie

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