I smile up at you....
I always look your way....
You never smile back....
You've never given me the time of day....
My heart beats for you everyday....
Sometimes I cry over you at night....
Do you even care? I know you don't....
Do you know I still love you? I'll bet not....
You will never change, this I know....
I will always be alone....
Forever I'll think of you....
This is my goodbye to you....
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Goodbyes can be very hard. And I love how you portrayed that here; but this just doesn't really seem poetic to me. Sorry. I think it can use more imagery and metaphors.
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This is really good.
And that's all there is to say.
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thanks!
I'm glad you enjoyed this.
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Goodbye's can be hard to say, you have portrayed this well.
good write.
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thanks for the comment lycan.
i'm glad you liked this.
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very good!!
this poem reminds me of Ben, how i feel! verry good. -
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thanks for the comment!
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Is this about the guy that's moving to Missouri?
I can feel a lot of emotion in it. I hope that writing about it made you feel beter. I'm always ready to talk. I Love this poem.
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for once, no it isn't.
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