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Bloodstains

Give me anything,
I won't say a thing
about what you have done
to me or anyone.

Just help me live my life,
I'm sick of drowning in strife,
our lives are entertwined
please don't leave me behind.

I'm choking on every breath,
I'm failing at every test,
I'm washing my bleeding hands,
but you can't understand
that I've given up everything
to try to change my fame,
I'm dying at your door,
my bloodstains on the floor.

This life I can't withstand
without a helping hand,
I'm asking you one more time
to save this life of mine.

I can't go on my own
without first being shown
how to cure my flaws
and I ask you because

I'm choking on every breath,
I'm failing at every test,
I'm washing my bleeding hands,
but you can't understand
that I've given up everything
to try to change my fame,
I'm dying at your door,
my bloodstains on the floor.

So pretend that you don't hear,
though you know i'm near
pleading for a cure
but you're still unsure.

My life depends on you,
so here's your final cue
my faith is running thin
and i'm starting to give in.

I'm choking on every breath,
I'm failing at every test,
I'm washing my bleeding hands,
but you can't understand
that I've given up everything
to try to change my fame,
I'm dying at your door,
my bloodstains on the floor.

My hands are frozen numb
and soon I will succumb.
My rasping drags of breath
are coming to a rest.

I'm fading in the night,
I'm giving up my last fight,
and it's all because of you,
you just wouldn't see me through.











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  • this sounds like it would make a good song.
    the words just flowed so well.

    good job.
    good luck.

  • This is so well written, Hon.. The spacing and poetic turn perfect.. But it's the sadness and the realization that kids speak these words to parents who just won't hear all the time, that reaches me.. You've shown exceptional talent here..