Take me as a child,
teach me the tricks of my body.
Take me as an innocent.
Whisper to me the truths of our hearts.
Take my adolescent hand,
place it where you want.
Take home in my pubescent eyes.
Place in them a different sparkle.
Take my lamb's wool.
Shier it how you'd like.
Take my hearts virtue.
Wipe the sin from my doll face.
Author notes
sometimes i wish i was young again to experience all those life changing event the
"right way".
but then again, if it was the case i wouldn't be me.
Don't you wish?
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the delicate innocence and submissive trust inherent in this brings me back to better days. you definitely captured something very special here my friend and it's hot.
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This is very well written, with delicacy and innocence. Well done!
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ahh to be young and an innocent virgin again lol dont we all wish sumtimes....its good, my fav lines are "Take my hearts virtue.
Wipe the sin from my doll face."
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the doll face line has a little more meaning to me.
it's my pet name so i'm glad you liked it.
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its cute
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Very nice. A reminess on the past and how we were raised into the people we have ecome today. I like it.
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yeah i do wish we could go back in time and re-do and re-live it all, but it doesn't work that way, there is a sadness here, but it works so well for the piece cause it's not over the top, great poem i love it
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wow that is sad but true in many cases, Our little angels don't deserve this. Very touching but sad poem. It was a pleasure to read.
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I wish I could give you constructive criticism but to be honest..i like it the way it is. It's just so good! Dark, sexy, telling, hiding, shyness,honest..this piece made me think of all these things..bravo
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thank you.
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exactly....you wouldn't be you and those things have made you an amazing poet...i do think those things sometimes...if i could just go back and get it right!!
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