David when I see you
it makes me smile
you make my day worthwile
I am happy when you talk to me
happy when you walk with me
I'll love you forever boy.
July/August/September ish, 1995 (I was 5)
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David, your smile glitters my senses
and makes the sun serenade my dedication.
The prettiest inspiration, lies in your sighs
and the way you say my name makes me fall in love.
The need to hold you, to have you and how,
each moment without you, my sky has no clouds.
I am forever inlove, blessed by God from above...
David do you remember me, as time has gone on?
Author notes
I wrote the fist one as 5.
the one after as me now.
In a list
A contest entry
- Before & After by Loki.
2280 points, ended March 12, 2009, 7 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - young hearts- PW by jessifer1792.
600 points, ended April 12, 2009, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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It's really cute that you wrote that when you were little! Both were very good =]
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Wow, revision of a poem from when you were 5 eh? You did rather well, considering, both times. They could stand to be two different pieces and still work well. Let me ask though, do you still know David? Best of luck in the contest.
-Løki
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What a time difference, but even then, there's still the same emotion resonating through the words
Great work
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