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I Woke Up Again

i am tethered
by ambiguous dreams
that slide from between
flesh stained teeth
having nothing to do
with four walls breathing
and sinking sharp claws
into my already lacerated
brain

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everyday is the same....i never seem to be able to put my goals in motion

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  • Dulcima
    November 25
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    Such economy of expression. You sum up the frustration of life brilliantly. So vivid.

  • Jrg
    April 11

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    Very honest piece

    I can actually feel the moment when you wrote this.. the moment before awakening is always like that. The imagery could be better, but the simile is fine. A little more paint on the brush wouldn't hurt. All in all a wonderful piece.


  • BlancetNoir gold member
    April 10

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    four walls breathing... my favorite line, conjures up thoughts of claustrophobia and the pressure to perform we place upon ourselves.


  • PastelMoons gold member
    March 5

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    You said so much
    in these 9 amazing lines
    and now my head hurts!!
    It's hard to organize our life
    just when we think we
    have one area together
    we'll find ten more that
    need attention!  
    We strive to be better
    that is the important
    thing, whether or not we ever
    reach our goals...
    In my humble opinion of course

    Great write!!
    You got me thinking!
    Thanks for sharing

    ~Pastel


  • Mistress Leala silver member
    February 24

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    Wow, my brain hurts now. Sometimes, I feel like that and then I just roll back over and try to ignore the gnawing. Great write.


  • Deathless1
    February 23

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    even if your goals aren't in motion, this piece is inspiring me, and i will have to speak for the other reader and say they would have to be inspired by this as well.

    great word choses, great pictures have been painted in my mind.

    "flesh stained teeth."

    that is great, so bad ass. lol

    this may be very dark, but at the say time, they way you have written it makes it flow very relaxed like.

    great writes


    • ApollosMuse
      February 23
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      i tell myself at the end of the day that tomorrow i will do all the things i am supposed to and i will not do the things i shouldn't...i really don't think i should have to make this promise every night...soemday i will get it right...i think the not giving in is actually where our strength lies not in the succeeding!!maybe that's just what i tell myself so i feel okay about it!!LOL!!


      • Deathless1
        February 23
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        that is right!
        not giving up, a junkie trying to stop is more likely to secede then a junkie that has given up the fight completely.


  • Simply Olivia
    February 23

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    a powerful write

    As for putting goals into motion, you have to take baby steps, one step/day at a time

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