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The Great Big Brother

You get to be the Great Big Brother
Just like the great Hudini
You get to show
Your younger brother
All the Magic in the world
You get to help him
You get to explore together
He will always look up to you
Because you are his
Great Big Brother
So enjoy all the magic
All the wonder
Together all the glory
Making you the best,
the GREATEST
BIG BROTHER
ever.

A contest entry

hoping i spelled Hudini correctly, i always enjoyed his magic, just forget how to spell his name

    I plan to revise this poem: please leave constructive criticism!
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  • Jesann gold member
    February 24

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    Ha ha..this is great.!!!
    I love the reference to the great Hudini !!!
    A wonderful poem...I'm sure Keelan will love it.
    "the GREATEST BIG BROTHER ever"...Is a terrific ending.
    Thank you for your entry


  • Never Known
    February 23

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    I love it....

    I think this one is cute.... so addorable... I love it i love it. To bad I have a crappy big brother. But I really do like this one I think it is so cute. keep up the good word!


  • Rose Of Black
    February 23
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    I liked thiiss one ^^ It's very to the point. Your often like that. The way you deliver your message. It almost suggests to me that your worried that your audiance won't get what you mean, and that you want them to understand 'Your' meaning of the poem rather than letting them form their own opinions. Still. I enjoyed this