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cinn alla

I stood alone at the head of the grey crag

where the rain-prism’s leaping light cut crystal tears

and the sky was a broad window upon life

where sunbeams shifted

 

those ridgeway hills were the backbone and sinews

those free-watered rivers were veins and vessels

those hard-shouldered highways for feet and great wheels

the paths of thinking

 

those towns and the square plantations of Sitka

features on a great face and a moving form

those farwaway snows were a sweep of a hand

a sleight of the wind

 

the small things and those that are trodden under

were the unnumbered hairs upon a young head

like sounds lifted up by the relentless breeze

the rustle of birds

 

if I had a love I would not give her wealth

nor a wish for years and the morning’s beauty

nor yet my own promises of faithfulness

I would give landscape

 

I would give the endless march and dance of clouds

their patching across the green and brown and grey

the sway of the flax-field in summer moments

like waves in the firth

 

I would give the brash collage of the city

the spillage and rust of abandoned seaports

the heather-lost and bracken-buried ruins

the heart-seeds of hills

 

for it is from those stones and tree-tall columns

that all memories and journeyings are made

through life and through the corridors of dreaming

where I hold treasure

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Cinn alla is an ancient Scottish place-name, words in old Irish which mean "at the head of the crag".

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  • Aelten
    September 3

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    That 5th stanza just says it all. Very lovely, a pleasure to read
    A~

  • Your Sapphics are all brilliant, and this one is certainly a shining example of your terrific talent.


  • deercatcher
    March 19
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    Windswept.


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 9

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    "if I had a love I would not give her wealth

    nor a wish for years and the morning’s beauty

    nor yet my own promises of faithfulness

    I would give landscape..."

     

    this stanza truly made me inhale and hold...

    time and time again I have been mesmerized 

    by you, by your brilliance, your heart, the very

    essence of you, and I find myself wondering

    if there will ever be a word I can find to adequately

    describe your beauty as a writer.  I think not...

     

    i love this and you, KC.

     

    Lane

     


  • daemonfae
    March 3

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    Stunning!

    I dont think i have ta tell you how astounding ur work is. U have the worlds acclaim and rightly so. Well done! Ur work is brilliant and i am officially a fan!! I would be honoured to have u critique my work. I am lookhn at gettn published.

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 3
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      I'm not logged on here very much, but the next time I am I will have a look at your poetry with great pleasure. It isn't easy getting published - I have had so very little published, despite having a very hard-working agent.


  • PoesyPeruser
    March 1

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    I can close my eyes and picture the landscape through your words.
    "if I had a love I would not give her wealth
    nor a wish for years and the morning’s beauty
    nor yet my own promises of faithfulness
    I would give landscape"

    So fitting So beautiful
    Poesy


  • Amera gold member
    February 28

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    Pretty good as always. I was wondering when you'd get back to the Sapphic form.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    February 27

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    I read "Where the rocks of Ardnamurchan meet the rolling Gaelic Sea" and, although liking the parts I could understand, found it slightly frustrating because one needed (and I bet this even applies to your next door neighbors) a glossary to wade through it. The tone and flow was absolutely wonderful, but I find this write just as beautiful and much more accessible. Thank you for a lovely read!

    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 28
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      The glossary thing: It's an effect of how I write, Jim. Sometimes I write sound before instant accessibility, and I wish that people would simply read the poem rather than read it with one finger on google, if you see what I mean. If I feel a word or two of Scots, or French, or Gaelic, or Romany, or Yiddish will make a poem glitter, I stick it in.

      This one - cinn alla - is my return to the Lose Sapphic form that I accidentally invented. Sometimes it just works. I think this was one of those times. Glad you liked it.

      I found out a couple of days ago that people have paid me the inestimable compliment of translating some of my poetry. I am now read in Gaelic, Russian, and Welsh! Jings aw michty!


  • IronMaiden1236
    February 26

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    Viola!!

    Вы - большая поэтесса


  • Ariosto II. gold member
    February 24

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    I have seen no better landscape painting than yours.
    Impressionist with words is what you are.

    No mere description here, however inspired.
    Your pen paints the very soul of the land and the sea.



  • Pure Thought silver member
    February 23

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    Immaculately written and perfectly painted images.

    This one belongs being published some-when.

    Buddy


  • Mirthryl
    February 23

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    Outstanding "rain-prism's leaping light cut crystal tears." Great imagery in the first stanza. Excellent personification in the second stanza. Might 'trodden under" relate to "a young head" as disappearing from view beneath the road as it dips from sight? Or something more unpleasant?
    Fifth stanza, ah, yes, but could a love not have the views without of necessity having you? Loved "sway of the flax-field" and "heart-seeds of hills."
    Beautiful descriptions again in the concluding stanzas. Does the concluding stanz refer to the fact that we are formed of the elements of the earth, and therefore it is the start of "all memories and journeyings"?
    I do not understand the "h[e]ld treasure." Is it the memories of nature at its stunning brilliance, or only in "corridors of dreaming" that such precious things are contained? Or is the treasure something else?
    I'm just feeling dense tonight! *sigh*


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      February 24
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      No you're not dense. Just accept that verse as being enigmatic.


  • DogFish silver member
    February 23

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    ...and if you could not give landscape, to give a poem like this would still be a generous act of affection!


  • nudul
    February 23

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    I love the start of this poem, very visual, it immediately brings in a sense of loneliness, the second stanza is brilliant in its metaphorical description of the body and the country side xxx well done xxx
    the fifth stanza echos the sense of loneliness and brings in a sense of want and longing, I like that the writer is willing to give everything beautiful in the world to make happy a love, something that is everlasting, never decaying.
    The last stanza is brilliant, the fact that the writer wants to give the memories he holds, his life and his dreams


  • Cannonsfire
    February 23

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    Your words just took me there and I love when I get to go somewhere and not leave my chair... C


  • liltulip gold member
    February 23

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    wonderful

    a lovely piece of imagery you conjure up here, thank you for letting us see in in our mind while reading your poetic words!

  • Bad Bill
    February 23

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    A beautiful poem of identity and affinity with the land, Mairi - this works on the metaphorical and the literal (not to mention the literary) level.

    Fáillte ar áis,
    Bill


  • Hetha gold member
    February 23

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    You paint some stunning and vivid imagery here.
    I loved it.

  • patrick20traveler
    February 23

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    Good write, except for the part where your lover only gets a view of the "endless march and dance of clouds" instead of fee simple title to the house and property.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 23

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    You may have gathered from the occasional piece of my own that I am rather fond of the kind of scenery painted here.
    Stunning stuff

    Jeff

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