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What Now?

I wanted to scream
-absolve-
fall into him.
I wanted to unzip myself -
hang crooked
and limp over the edge of his chair-
a dried out pelt of some extinct creature.
I wanted to hate myself-
titled chin-
secret-squealing pig tails-
I wanted



to know






what I wanted.

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  • written-in-ink
    March 8

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    i think that this is great
    nice
    AN


    i love the begining
    great
    i havent read your stuff in a while.
    <3


  • etoile
    February 28
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    wow, this was beautifully written. i love all the imagery and metaphor in this piece.

    I wanted to unzip myself -
    hang crooked
    and limp over the edge of his chair-
    ---
    that part was my favourite.
    i liked the ending as well, especially in relation to the title.

    thanks for entering and goodluck


  • Injury
    February 23
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    I thought it was perfect

    Loved it, love it. great write:


  • TChaplinette
    February 23
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    wow.

    just wow.



  • Candy Morphine
    February 23

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    woah. I'm not sure if this quite relates to the song. (it seemed pretty bitter) But, in releation to that, this is still a hard hitting and cynical poem.

    excellent.

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