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weighted d o w n.

Missing image
Rain  f
        a
          l
            l
              s    upon my heart

and weighs me  d o w n.

Heavy drops forming tears
paint my skin a brighter hue

reviving a broken
                        stem.

In a list

A contest entry

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  • Heva Feva
    June 9

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    I like the way you use the flower as a metaphor for yourself. You have a beautiful poem, I love the dp. It's so much fitted (not sure if that's a word ?) into such a short, beautiful poem. Good luck and thanks for entering my contest.
    -heva

  • A-muse-in-writer
    February 23
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    Nicely written.