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Short Love

Wrap me in your sturdy arms
and breathe your love onto my neck.
I'll close my eyes and stretch the time
to cover infinity. Please comfort me with that.
I want to feel you deep inside of me
and see our love written on your face.
I want to bite my lip and hold you close
but I just will not feel the same.
I wish I could kiss you and know
that in a while I'll see you again.
But I know that soon I have to leave
and that this affair will have to end.

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  • mjm1495
    April 8

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    Emotion!

    There was a lot of emotion and imagery set into this poem and the title fits in with the ending so it was a good read.


  • Lolitax3
    March 28

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    Great choice of words & use of opposing emotions in one.
    "I'll close my eyes and stretch the time to cover infinity." was probably my favorite--esp. how the sentence stretched out to the next line to mimic the meaning.


  • loving.a.soldier
    March 26

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    I really enjoyed this piece. It is very well written. I wasn't expecting the ending. But that's what makes this even better!!! It is a sad ending. But, I love this =) Keep it up!!

    <3 - Jess

  • arunparui
    March 19

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    Don't mind

    I pasted your "Short Love" in my heart.I am comfort with that.I will feel it deep inside of me. "I'll see you again" to visit other poems.But "I know soon I have to leave" to continue my site "seeing".After all very nice poem it is to read.


  • tenderheart22
    March 10

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    Hm...when I read it I couldn't help but feel sad for the person who is leaving the loved one. They seemed very much in love and maybe they had been together for a short period of time.
    Anyway...lovely!
    *♥*


  • Valerien Raven
    March 10
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    A very nice piece.

    A very interesting twist at the end "But I know that soon I have to leave
    and that this affair will have to end." I did not expect that, lol. I figured it was going to be a nice lovey kinda poem.

    Anyway, I love a poem with a twist, small or large, it doesn't matter . A very brilliant write here, loved it.

    10/10, Keep up the good work.


  • HaleyMary
    February 22
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    Powerful write. This seemed to express a sadness. Like a longing to feel loved, but a knowledge that the love that is shown presently is either not real or is not going to last very long. Hope you find a love that lasts awhile in your life. Thanks for sharing and keep that pen flowing.

    Haley Mary

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