I want to be myself,
And at the same time breathe for you.
Everyday I live, I see your promises come true.
There are obstacles to face, there are storms I have to brace,
Yet as the glowing sun retreats, I am awed by saving grace.
Every morning as I wake,
I tug my plastic shades until they're hidden in the glare.
The light that reigns inside my room, assures me that you are there.
My heart open to pray, to listen and hear what you would say,
Silences the world, as you walk me through each day.
I'll sing out louder now,
And lift my voice to rise above the chorus.
Night or day, either way, I know you're here for us.
I lean on you when I'm afraid, I trust in you and the plans you've made,
I found my breath when I found you, through glory, hope, and love portrayed.
Author notes
"And surely I am with you always til the very end of the age."
He is always there. Always.
So, Lord, I do everything for you. It's yours.
3) HOW LIFE IS COMPLICATED OF SIMPLE AND WHAT GETS YOU THROUGH EACH DAY
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What do you think? Any good?
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It's much easier to get through a day when you know someone is on your side, especially that spirit that can take you further in peace. Congrats on all the bling-bling- with this entry. I want to thank you for your entry into the following contest: "To Be Put On My Favorites List."
Ted E
PS: Your entry has been blessed by the three wise clappers, but don't spend the whole nine points in one place(lol)!
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wow... this is jut so full of that uplifting feeling...awesome. thank you so much for entering my contest and best of luck!
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This was good as well. Only thing I can pick at is that some of the lines are much longer than the others.
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this is so awsum really..i lov it
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Gosh its good to see people MY age love the lord so. He deserves it and most people our age just dont care. God bless you
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thats so beautiful...like a well woven prayer...
praise the Lord...
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This is a really cool poem. I can see your love for God. Having that relationship with him will always get you through rough times. I enjoyed the read!!!
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I want to be myself,
And at the same time breathe for you.
Everyday I live, I see your promises come true.
There are obstacles to face, there are storms I have to brace,
Yet as the glowing sun retreats, I am awed by saving grace.
nice entery -
Great great great great. i loved it and i love how much emotion you put into this piece.
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I really like the theme of silence, and I think that could really pull some amazing power, as is some of the diction you use. I think the imagery is a little too commonplace, and could use a little bit more emotion and metaphors to help it be unique.
I thought the last line, had the strongest sentiment but the rhyme seemed to just be there to rhyme and it took away from that.
WritingFree -
August silence in God
Very well chosen theme of silence; Really like the title; "There are obstacles to face, there are storms I have to brace,
Yet as the glowing sun retreats, I am awed by saving grace."
This conjures the desire to see and feel what God has done through us in august , majestic silence
Great write!
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great
wow I feel loved and safe within his presence thank you for reminding me of his constant presence. hugz cj
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Honest and true. Great piece.
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I can feel the strong emotion. The beging seemed about love but then I got the message. I do not really believe in god but the poem was still really good. Thank you for your entry!
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Great job! I love the emotion and willingness to praise God and follow him. I, at first, honestly thought this was about a lover, but it makes more sense and has a stronger message now that I realize it is about God.
Great job on this write!
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A very honest and heartfelt poem. Spoke loudly.
Thank you for entering this into my contest.
--Katie--
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Wonderful
A very touching and well written poem. So soothing to read. Congratulations on the silver.
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Full of love and inspiration. Congrats po sa Silver.
Happy Easter!
summer51
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wow..such a lovely and honest poem...I felt peace when I read this piece...Happy Easter...thank you for participating in my contest!
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Excellent
I really loved this poem. I'm not particularly religious myself but you can feel the love that you do for your faith. Spoken from the heart. Excellent. -
this is beautiful but r4it suppose to be a bible verse. thank you for entering. this is very uplifting. kep writing poet. God bless you always
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