Invisible,
Standing here alone,
You cannot see me.
I am nothing.
I am nothing to you,
Just another troubled kid.
Eyeliner, hair dye,
Piercings, tattoos.
Society does not try to look beyond,
Deeper past the surface into the soul.
Scared of what you do not understand,
You go about life ignorant and foolish.
Ignoring what you don't care to see,
What marks your delusional picture of reality.
You see innocence and indestructible snowflakes,
Pretty birds that sing a morning melody.
Growing life that lines the pavement,
Clear blue skies with no sign of trouble.
Smiling children with the occasional bruise,
A limping cat that caught it's foot.
Do you ever ask what's wrong,
Suspect foul play... is it possible?
Perhaps but unlikely.
You only wish to see what you want to see.
You walk past me,
Notice nothing except a concrete wall.
Tears are falling from my eyes,
Invisible.
You brush me off as another troubled kid,
A punk, An emo, A chav.
Call me what you wish,
Your words wash over me like a raging water fall.
I'll pretend I don't care,
Give you some attitude,
It's what you expect and I don't wish to disappoint.
But should you look deeper you may see the truth.
That my makeup is just the mask I wear,
My attitude a protective shield,
Should you come too close I may shrink away and bite,
But I mean no harm to those around me.
I just wish for someone to look deeper,
To take the chance and see me for what I really am.
Perhaps fein some concern,
And maybe ask if I'm alright.
Author notes
Picture belongs to Broken_by_chix0r
Personally I am tired of listening to people use labels such as chav and emo. Why is it okay to judge people by how they look in today's society. Why can't we just listen to how they think and how they feel and see with our hearts rather than our eyes?
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I see the content and the potential to be really awe inspiring... but at the moment the way you have written it seems jumbled.
some lines make sense but in a way they also make no sense becasue of the weay you have put forward your thoughts.
In otherwords your lines are fractured in the wrong sort of way.
Another point is where you rush through imagery in order to cram it all in.
Try to take one image per verse and kick your readers attention with imagery because at the moment your poem is based on a stream of conciousness, which is borderline prose...
hmmm I loved all your ideas and your strong emotion came through your poem but because of your language use, it didn't grab me.
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What a brilliant write! So very true...
Appearances often mask what lies beneath. The world would definately be a better place if we asked "how are you" and really wanted and listened for the answer.
Best wishes!
KW~
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Wonderful write, teens have been facing this kind of discrimination even back in my day but we were called hippies.
Well done -
lovely-ly penned !
my heart goes out to u !
u have written this with all your heart i can see !!!
well done friend..i hope ppl read this and stop having wrong and assumed judgements !!!!
good luck in the contest !
i hope u win !!!!!!
~Anagha
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I completely agree with you!
All the best in the contest, Sincerely, Cheryl
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Your alright the world is all wrong. But I do understand where you are coming from. Society sucks. It was a pleasure to read.
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Chance Encounters
When chance is taken, glance behind
mask which is placed in self-defence, -
or some protection which the blind
may blinder render - no offence !
what space remains to trace unsigned
anguish which through self-pretence
imagines hurdles which unwind
with magic touch self-evidence.
Perhaps the answer may be found
through more transparency unbound ? -
This poem really showed great emotion and it is very relatable. I liked you use of words and it flowed well. Nicely done.
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I've been wanting to write a poem about this exact subject but have not been able to find words great enough. It's amazing to find someone who feels exactly the same way. You're right to say that people see what they want to see in people, based on looks, and it's so disgusting that people do that. This poem is good, it holds a lot of emotion. Also though, I think there is a reason. Don't we find friends who care that way? That's the only good that comes of it, I think. Amazing write.
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I just wish for someone to look deeper,
To take the chance and see me for what I really am.
i think this is what everyone wants at the deepest level. thank you very much for sharing this with me today and i am looking forward to reading more from you in the near future. good luck in these contests that you have entered. viyanna rosemarie
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"You walk past me,
Notice nothing except a concrete wall.
Tears are falling from my eyes,
Invisible."
Though this quatrain is nestled in with some other very brilliant words it could have stood alone as a great poem.
You're words have truly touched me, and I thank you greatly for your entry.
Lauren
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I am totally with you! I hate it when people call others emo...don't they realize that its merely a genre of music...its not even a "type" of person. How can we judge people's appearances so easily and then just disregard people! It drives me nuts!
Great write! I think this is a real eye opener to a problem with today's society!
Thanks!
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This is really amazing, one of you best. I like the message you are sending.
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