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Sand II

It used to be
That a current would come along
And stir up our sands
We'd swirl around one another
Shift through each other
But now
The water is low
And we are a sand bar
Incapable of being moved

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  • TheStupidLamb
    February 23
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    indeed.


  • blue-eyed-disaster
    February 22

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    hmm....curious image portrayed....the line *incapable of being moved* seems to get me cuz it sounds like a double meaning...cool write, i know u don't like me commenting on ur stuff, but i was just takin a quick peak.