The mime fell down
and broke his crown
didnt make a sound...
but when he broke his heart...
it was heard by all,
in a deafening silence
A contest entry
- Mimes by Yemassee.
653 points, ended February 23, 18 entries
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Physical pain
not as resounding
as that of emotion.
A perfect mating of words, PK!
M-C
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Pix's comment said it all.
Feelings can sound loud than the noise of huge waterfall.
Very short but very good poem
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I immediately think of silent screams when reading your last verse, something I've written about. Silence in and of emotion is transmitted on a different frequency...not everyone can hear it or it just doesn't want to be heard intentionally.
The mime's silent antics are rehearsed and perfected, there is no way to prepare for a broken heart.
Very nicely done Thanks for entering.
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I think you have something there silence, things heard or not heard; things that do not wish to be heard or sensed... thank you so much for your kind words, and taking time to share your thoughtful insights...PK
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Proof that I'm no mime PK. lol
But of course the idea here is that physical pain he can endure and cover-up but emotional pain, that is another story and everyone worth being loved knows that a broken heart is not possible to be covered up...no matter how wise it might be to do so.
And I know often silence is louder than a yell, especially when we are used to hearing screams.
But when the hurt stops the mime can go up one art level and become a clown and profit from what he's learned.
Thanks PK, I peeked to see who it was, lol
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