Your hands are still drenched
In red straight from the source
I'm already on the mend
You feel no remorse
You know my past
I'm not that easy to break
You take that as a challenge
You'll try as long as it takes
What you fail to realize
Is I get stronger every time
As your heart stays put
Mine continues to climb
Every time you reach in
And you tear it apart
I use anger and hope
To repair my broken heart
You wont see it coming
The day I attack
This time it'll be your
Chest that is cracked
I'll reach in and
I'll tear yours to shreds
It will be my hands
That are covered in reds
The pain you will feel
Will be brand new to you
I cant wait to see your face
When I bid you adieu
Until that day
I am biding my time
Soon enough my hands
Will be red with your crime.
Author notes
Prompt: Broken Heart and Bloody Hands
A contest entry
- Contest Quickie by Dragonbabyx3.
400 points, ended May 30, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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I LOVE it!
my first impression is that this is the kind of vengeance that seems perfectly just. I love the fact that you win through whatever they do to you.Very dramatic!
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yeah i really felt this
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BANG!
This packs a punch! In your face, direct and sure. There is depth, power and determination between every line. My eyebrows are high, I am impressed.
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wow, what a story here! great job and congrats on gold.
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hmmm love the feeling put in this. Very well written. Best of luck too.
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"I used anger and hope to repair my broken heart."
That line rings extremely true. It's always a little bit of both. Well phrased girl!
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this is utterly amazing. so much emotion is spoken through your words. the last stanza really made me think, in a good way :].
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A major congrats on the GOLD!!!!! I do believe he will get his in the end no matter if it's from you or not. Just like the saying goes, "what goes around comes around" is one of the most true statements I know. Congrats again!
Ted E
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Congratulations on the Golden Chalice!!
Well done, Poet!! Peace, xx Cyn 
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Great write! I love it. I love where you took the prompt. Nice flow and rhyme. You did a great job on this write.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing.
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Wow. Agai another amazing poem. Dragonbabyx3 is right the rhyming sounded great and the whole piece flowed really well. And the story through it was just magnificant and really quite dark. Well done x
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wow! This is a brilliant entry! I love your take on the prompt! Flowed well and the rhyme didnt sound forced! I am usually not a fan of rhyme, but I will most assuredly make an exception! This is an outstanding piece! Great write poet!
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