When You cant close your eyes at night
Untill he's by your side
When you look into the future
And see yourself as his bride,
Your in love.
When you stare at you phone
Just Waiting for it to ring
When he can make you smile
Without saying a thing,
Your in love.
When he kisses your lips
And stars fill your sky
When whispers i love you
And you feel you could fly,
Your in love.
When i look in his eyes
My whole world takes shape
When trouble surrounds me
He is my escape....
Im in love....<3
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I like your poem love Its very rythmatic You should be a song writer You write with feeling, and its very expressive.
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This is a nice poem. I've been a silent partner in the poetry group for a while. Be on the lookout for my work. My latest write is "Candlelight Night". Again, good poem.
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the comment below mentioned something about the look of the poem, ignore it. I love the spacing and the structure it gives an extra sense of emotion to your poem and to me poetry should be something raw and it is art with words, instead of something you would write for your high school English teacher.
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This is touching. Very sweet and heartfelt. My only advice is about the look of the poem. When you look at most of my work you can see I spend a lot of thought on how to 'space' out the wording in order to improve the over all look of the poem.
You words are strong enough, this is probably not necessary. But I would space out each verse with a line between "you're in love" and the next verse. I just think that will help with the over all look. Also I believe 'your' should be 'you're'.
Other then that great poem. Keep up the great work.
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Absolutely beautiful. I loved this b rilliant masterpiece. This is so full of love & heart. I love it. God bless you always in all you do and write and keep up the excellent work.
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Stunning write. Very well thought out. The rhyme is perfect, the flow superb. Well done.
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Very well written.
Like how the last lil sentance just brings it all together. Very happy lovey poem.
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Thanks so much! havent heard from you in forever!!! still in the service?
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I LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!
It's reallly good!!!!!!!!
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