Winter-
Winter when she cries,
her tears are silver, white, beautiful and quiet,
and nobody is there to hear it.
Spring-
Spring when she dances
her dress spins and where she steps flowers bloom,
and everybody watches in awe.
Summer-
Summer when she sings,
rays of heat brush her cheek and makes her laughter shimmer,
and everybody enjoys it.
Fall-
Fall when she falls into slumber,
the leaves coo their last breath and people sigh in sadness,
and everybody misses earlier times of happiness.
I have no clue, put it as it is.
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This is beautiful... As a linguist, your title caught my attention, and I was surprised to find out that you are only 12. I wasn't this good at 12; heck, I'm almost 23 now, and I still don't think I'm as good as you.
Your poetry is like fine wine... A pleasure to have come across, and one that will only get better with age.
Well done, and keep writing!
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oh wow!!! this is absolutely amazing! seriously.. i dont really know how to describe how much i love this.. but seriously this is beautiful. i love how you personified all the seasons, so beautifully. well done on this
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Great use of imagery. Very well written, I think. The picture really highlights the poem.
I think its great!
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I agree with Saint Sorrow, it totally reminds me of seasonal depression.
But, may I make a suggestion? Delete everything after the Fall stanza.
You really don't need an explaination- the art of writing the way you did is painting a picture for your readers to understand and think about.
Great job otherwise.
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ok. you spelled watches wrong. you spelled it whatchs.
and i am not sure what cooe is. other than that i loved it! great job!
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Just amazing.
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This reminds me of a seasonal depression syndrome.
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thank you
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Wow! I really liked this!! Great job!!
nicely written, and it has a great meaning to it.
You really are talented at writing.
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Wow, this is an excellent poem, very well writen and I love the meaning in it. This is also the first poem in a while where I haven't been able to point out any spelling currections! For that I shall give you a clappy thing (even though now I'm out).
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hotpinkpowerranger
it's AWESOME you are soooo good at writing poetry
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Wonderful! I really loved this, you have some spelling errors in places, but other than that great job!
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I like it! I think it's very pretty. Winter is my favorite. Love the imagery!
Spelling corrections: Line 3, beautiful, not beatiful. Line 8, watches, not whatchs. Line 15, coo and sadness, not cooe and saddness.
Great job!
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This Rocks. Your Poets are a-w-e-s-o-m-e AWESOME
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thank you Alisha.
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