Your hands absorbed the smell of sweet pine’s cone,
your breath stole flows of misty mountain’s breeze,
I watch your gaze upon the cliff’s unpolished might
when light descends upon the hazy trees
and snowy owls await the luck of night
as blankets glitter, snow caresses stone.
I lick away the stars from trembling lips
and hide my face inside the shelter of your palms,
eyes meeting eyes, your lips meet mine in kiss,
I smile to you and chant of love, my private psalms,
your sweetness’ touch is just another term for bliss
and words of love trail heart’s unwritten scripts.
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A contest entry
- -SPING/SUMMER/WINTER/AUTUMN-season contest-PW allowed- by Heva Feva.
675 points, ended October 15, 2009, 57 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Love it! Love it! Love it!
This is so cool! I really like this bit:
"I lick away the stars from trembling lips
and hide my face inside the shelter of your palms,
eyes meeting eyes, your lips meet mine in kiss, "
You're a finalist!!!!
Thank you so much for entering my contest, I love your poem! Good luck...
-heva
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Ah, so very serene and nice.
Well written dear,
mj.
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your blend of nature, love, and rhyme - is unique. lovely
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This is stunning. I really enjoyed reading this. This had beautiful imagery and language and it was just perfect in every way!
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Outstanding
This is a well crafted poem with an interesting rhyme scheme that show cases your ability to write love poetry in a way that touches a chord with the reader. The imagery here is inspired. Best of luck in the contest.
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this was very easy to visualize. nice write!
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Delightful blend of winter imagery and intimacy, and nice rhymes. This is my favourite line 'and hide my face inside the shelter of your palms'.
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SO LOVELY!!!!
On those cold and windy winter nights just being with your loved one, arms wrapped around each other bringing tender warmth to each other. A lovely winter's night when two spend it this way.
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"I lick away the stars from trembling lips
and hide my face inside the shelter of your palms, "
this is ggooorrgeous.
thx. for this lovely read this morning, Sonja.
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You are a wonderful poet depicting the stories of the heart..you are a master to express the beauty of love through the words of the poetic bliss..I love the poetry you wrote here..thanks for sharing..
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Exquisite...
"the shelter of your palms"
"chant of love, my private psalms"
These are some of the finest metaphorical, lyrical & actual examples & descriptions of loves I've yet to read, my dear Friend. How lovely this is. How tender, how very poignant & true to life & love, as well! Simple, yet overflowing with the many complexities of love's branches, extending from the mighty tree, stretching from the soil, reaching for the sky. Glorious penning, Sweetie. Good luck in the contest? Alright...but methinks you have the right idea about LIFE & LOVE, which is, by far, more important & lasting. ♥ Wanda
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A beautiful write. Heartfelt. Lovely depth of feeling. Vivid descriptives. You paint a vivid picture with your words. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Nice use of simile. Good word choice, alliteration and nice assonance. Well penned. Best wishes in the contest.
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If you meant to put the whole thing in iambic meter, you succeeded. If you wanted just pentameter, you missed a few. I liked it though so it doesn't matter. Nice job.
Thank you for entering my contest. Good luck to you. Please refrain from rating or replying to any comment made by me or my lovely and wonderful cojudge(s).
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