I'm an old man who lives in Australia,
who's convinced that his limericks are a failure.
My rhyming is fine
until the fourth line...
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short sweet
can be funny however i just think it is cute thank you for entering -
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clara
Thankyou for your comments.
Best wishes from 'down-under'.
Shenton
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Haha, this made me laugh. Nice write, and best of luck in the contest.
I really like this how it is, but I figured I'd throw out an alternative that might offer something to make it fit the classic limerick rhythm a drop better:
There once was a man from Australia,
Whose limericks all were a failure.
His rhyming is fine
until the fourth...row
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Topnotchsy
My 'almost a limerick' is autobiographical and is therefore couched in the first person.
The rhyme scheme for a 'classic' limerick is
a-a-b-b-a; 'row' does not rhyme with 'fine'.
You change from past to present tense between lines 2 and 3.
Thankyou for your comments, and for your very generous applause.
Best wishes from 'down-under'.
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Got it.
My thinking was that by using a word that so obviously doesn't rhyme in the 4th line (the line you mention is the one you go wrong) while there is a perfectly obvious word that does rhyme (line in this case) it might accentuate the humor. Obviously it was just a thought, and the poem is your own.
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cute
your rhymning is fine and i like this write thanks for entering
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clara
Thankyou for your complimentary comments and your very generous applause.
Best wishes from 'down-under'.
Shenton
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