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Teetering towards the Edge of Insanity

Left
Teetering toward the edge of oblivion
Plaguing, gnashing, intoxicated
Screams of pleasure of gouge, gore
Sorcery...mallice...
Somebody save the sinner I am.

Right
Peace, love
God in his holy name
Pleasure, delight...
Happiness in all I can be.

Somebody save the sinner I am.

Teetering towards the edge of oblivion.

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 10

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    I like how you show two side of the coin. The repetition is also very effective. Thanks for entering my contest and for writing for me. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!