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Flower Trail~

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Until you come
I practice stepping softly;

looking over my shoulder
at lavender petals
tossed behind my train

singing in the rain

at twilight
with wind whispering
my clandestine thoughts



      t
        w
            i
            r
            l
          i
      n
  g


within fluttering heartbeats

between shadow
of feathered silhouettes

eyes twinkling;
like stars,
embraced

when you come.


♥♥





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Author notes

my prompt was:

"Dancing with my shadow in the rain "

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  • penman gold member
    May 22
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    Excellent

    Another terrific write. So very well crafted. Congratulations on the gold.

  • ea silver member
    March 18
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    beautiful, Lynda! I especially love the *twirling* How perfect is that?? Congrats on the gold!


  • Nom de Plume
    March 10

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    beautiful write as always, really salsa'd with the prompt
    congrats on your gold


  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 10

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    Very, very nice. Love it! Such a beautiful read! Thanks for entering my contest and for writing for me. Good luck. It’s an honor to have you show your work here!


    • poet2angels gold member
      March 10
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      What a sweet thing to say! Thank you for the wonderful inspiration!

      Lynda


  • AliasDenied
    March 6

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    Excruciatingly good =] Love the flow, the design, everything. Spectacular job, best of luck in contest!


  • Errant Panther gold member
    February 24

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    what a beautiful and wistful piece that flows so easily from your pen. great job with the prompt and best of luck with the contest.


  • Legend silver member
    February 23
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    Any comment other than excellent would be wasted words So i will stay with that Excellent


  • Malabu
    February 23

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    anticipations slowstepping in a vail of snow white...petals beneath her feet...she awaits this man who will take her hand
    and lead her in dance, on a moonlit night...

    sigh~
    mal


  • Cerulean Sunrise gold member
    February 22
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    Lovely poem. Lovely formatting. Loved the curve to twirling.


  • kaibab silver member
    February 22

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    So beautiful in thought and dance, he will come...and your heart is open star drawing light...shining way


  • MuddyKing
    February 21

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    for some reason I see a lady in white moving with the grace
    of a whispering wind
    bracing what is dear and a smile
    that lights the sky
    I love when I read and it comes to life
    something that doesn't happen often enough

    beautiful

    peace and hugs
    Muddy


  • poeticweaver gold member
    February 21

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    Beautiful my sweet sister, your words bring a soft sigh to the reader in me. Such a lovely take on the given prompt, and I wish you all the best within the contest...for your whispered words always grace poetic pages. Much love, your brother, Timothy aka

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