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Dual Purpose Personality. [Reserve.]

 

 

a plastered heart, that's melted so many times

it almost reaps the death of flowers, through fragile fingers.

I was that girl, in dodger blue dress,

with the purple ponytail; those days faded

like old jeans, those denims were damaged,

from too many ruined requims -

I sung a demented song, so I weep the entrails

of a failed audition on my lips, tinitus kisses my ears,

with deadly poison as words are thrown fast at a fragile face -

I hope cosmetics can put life back into limp cheeks

and gangrene wavers of skin.

This is just one act of revenge he's given

and I know he's far from over yet.

 

 




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15. RED HOT CHILI PEPPERS: It's so lonely when you don't even know yourself.

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  • obatala
    March 20, 2009
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    Emotion: 17/20
    Spelling and Grammar: 7/10
    Beginning and Ending: 9/10
    Personal Opinion: 8.5/10
    Creativity/Originality: 9/10
    Relation to Quote: 6/10
    Imagery/Metaphor/Poetic Devices: 7/10
    Title: 5/5
    Diction: 4/5
    Line-breaking/Flow: 5/5
    Impact: 3/5

    TOTAL: 80.5/100

  • obatala
    March 18, 2009
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    Hey, sorry to bother.
    Can you please put your chosen prompt in your AN?

  • obatala
    March 3, 2009
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    Please try to finish this by Saturday.