(and) upon violet
f
e
l
l
those emotions,
un{contained}
winter heart oppositions<
MORE
differences
::between:: the two.
He's **not holding on**
well,
((losing)) what he [was]
^in^ sleepless """black""" nights
of fulfilling ,,,white,,,
hits,
}{mirror's}{
poignancy
brings it ALL back.<<
Walk
d
o
w
n
the hall,
away far.
Feel trail...
purple blazers]
marking !wonders.!
Far away.
A contest entry
- Forms/Dirty Pretty by the evil angel.
400 points, ended May 10, 49 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
:O
Comments
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Huh. The way you did this intrigues me. I like that you don't punctuate and accent every single word, but you still seem to be able to make every word important. That's a unique quality to hold. I've already decided not to do dirty pretty, but you do it very well and I want to congratulate you on that. Good job.
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for me this needs a very good but the way you write it takes away from the 'dirty pretty' feel it has. but then again i just feel you sugar coated a already sweet cupcake :]
either way good luck in the contest :]
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