I am mama's little angel,
all pink and sweet indeed.
Like a tiny candy cane
my kisses for mama are sweet.
I giggle and mama smiles
for they're like bubbles in the wind.
And only my mama can catch them,
with her loving grin.
As I clap my hands in excitment,
and mama sings me a song.
My eyes grow heavy,
for the day was so long.
But when she kisses her angel,
so sweet her taste indeed.
For angels are like candy canes,
sweet through, and through you see.
Author notes
Love Patty
A contest entry
- My Little Angel by Kal-El.
600 points, ended March 7, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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this is really great I really like it you deserve to be in the finalist
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Aww! With my boys well on the way, this made me cry!! I loved it. Such a sweet poem!!! Smooth flow, and even smoother rhyme. Very well done. All of your poems just make me smile. I loved it!!
love always
mylee -
THIS is lovely for rhyme and content of a baby to play its little themes in life, thank you for giving me a smile too.. good luck MM
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This is so precious!!! I loved every word!
Az
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Aww honey a beautiful poem
I love your words
Sweet
Love Julie x
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So Darlng!
A few suggestions:
S-1/L-1 mamas/mama's
S-2/L-2 their/they're -- L-3 delete comma
S-3/L-1 delete comma -- L-2 replace and with 'my' -- . . .L-4 replace and with for
S-4/L-4 add comma between through and you
This is sooo cute, Patty! I like the way much of this poem is the child speaking but ends with mama's opinion of our littlest cherubs.
This surely will win the GOLD!
Luv & hugs, BonnieQ 
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aw wow this a very beautiful poem I loved your rhyme and imagery throughout good luck in the contest8hug*maralisa
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This is beautiful! Just like the one that wrote it! What a wonderful read this is! I love the soft, sweet tone this has! Great job!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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this is sweet. so innocent and sweet
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