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Do I Have A Chance With You?

Every day, the sun is guaranteed to rise
Every day, I melt from the look in your eyes
Sometimes my heart will beat so quickly
And all cuz your such a little fittie
My mind is filled with thoughts of you
My poetry is filled with words of you
For so long now, I’ve adored you
And now I lay my feelings before you
Now I’m telling you exactly how I feel
Of the thoughts and feelings I conceal.

You are so beautiful, it’s untrue
I’ve always wanted to know if I have a chance with you
I’d do anything to be in your arms tonight
Just to wake up with you by my side
When I write these words, I have you in my mind
I think you’re ‘the one’ I was destined to find
Never has a girl as beautiful as you caught my eye
You must believe that this is not a lie
I wanna be with you until the sun, for the last time, sets
Cuz you’re the most amazing girl I’ve ever met x x x










Do I Have A Chance With You?????

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  • Epd
    February 22, 2009

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    Awesome.. whoever the girl is I bet she was chuffed to bits to read your words - makes me feel all happy and tingly inside


  • Megan E. Bloy
    February 22, 2009

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    Lovely poem! It makes me feel a happy fuzzy feeling inside.

    The girl is a lucky one that's for sure. Hopefully you have a chance!


  • onyx2010
    February 22, 2009

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    Beautiful poem, what a wonderful feelings expressed so lovely. I wish I was the women. It makes me feel heartfelt. Good job


  • estbelle gold member
    February 21, 2009

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    lucky girl

    I wish you the chance to have her
    your intentions are so beautiful
    hope she recognizes it.

    Thanks for the read

    belle

    thanks for learning a new word from you...'fittie'