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Shoes

Tears find my heart
With the epitaph of your love
I am lost, once again,
Staring into the room.
Once there was a precious boy,
Playing with his father's shoes
Holding himself firm,
Pretending to be a stronger man.
Now the boy is lost
To the blankets of yesteryears...
And my tears come again
Reburning my scars of my youngest son

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  • Everlasting Ellen
    February 26

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    Damn this is awesome, Its got a lot of poetic ability in it, something that I don't have the flair for. You have a true Talent Nel and I envy it


  • honey bear
    February 22

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    an exelent write and a very interesting take on th egiven prompt, good luck in the contest with this sad but very good write


  • Lady Michaella
    February 22

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    omg..... this is amazing.. so sad... wow.. so deep and meaningful. fantastic work here.. great meaning.


    very well penned
    thanks for entering,
    and best of luck in the contest!!

    your judge,
    -Lemon Bee-
    xx