These words i need to say
i've told them so
many times before
i-
have nothing more to
write or pray
to
here alone again i stand
crying about memories
i shall never understand.
Letters of a name i
can never forget
carefully scrawled
i-
cannot bear the thought
of washing away
her name
from among these empty walls.
Lessons i guess not yet
learned beckon from afar
away the nights pass
as
the empty winter's chill
invades the silent rooms where
i-
we once laughed within.
Candlelight shadow plays
eternally dance upon
my tear stained face
as i once again sing this song...
for you.
Author notes
"Mikey was a good dog"
Rather than revisit that old pain i'd like to share this one. Therefore it's an old piece but the feelings still do exist.
This was the culmination of many lost loves up until that point. i attempted to recreate the emptiness felt within.
A contest entry
- Imagery! Poems about lost Love by FaeRae.
1200 points, ended February 25, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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You did it well
You recaptured the pain well. There are a few things I would change such as 'shall' to 'will', but that's just grammar and you may be totally correct. the other thing I thought would make this stronger would be: I-
-we once laughed. But again, that is my opinion and does not in any way take away from the powere or pain of the piece. Very well written.
Blessed Be,
Rae
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