spring jewel
on the crown of a tulip
a dew drop
Springtime
spreads sweet fragrance
bringing back small critters
opening fresh petals to the bees
blooming
Spring day
fighting for my lunch
ants and bees
Gaze/Mari non official entry
Author notes
Those sights are what I miss and long to see again, except the bees too close to me!!!
It's I, Gaze/Mari
In a list
A contest entry
- Huguenauties Contest No.#41 for MEMBERS OF HUGH WYLES FAVOURITES GROUP ONLY by huguenauties.
750 points, ended February 24, 2009, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I can see you are an observer. A green Messiah to whom nature learns alot, yet proceeds ot ignore. I loved the form you've used here, and majestically so! Titus / Tercil
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ahhh, rejuvenating scenes, you are such a master of capturing images
I love the tulip part
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Poetic. (Smile.)
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Tulips are a favorite of mine and so is the imagry of your opening lines I can see the morning sun's light shining in the tiny dewdrop jewel.
Ants can be pests but without them there would be no blooming peonies. Mint clippings help to keep those uninvited guests away from picnicing. Bees are another story. Still trying to solve that one.
Your write has me longing even more for the Spring. Only one more month of winter for me.
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Love the haiku's and cinquains Gaze you make them look so easy to do.
Hine
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These sets are so nice, Mari So much in so few lines. I think if you were in the voting the rest of us would be pretty much out of the running
This has been a good contest.
Dee
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Short and SWEET! Loved your haikus (hybrid haikus?) and cinquains! Whatever they are..I like 'em!
<3 Maureen
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these are cute and yes not with the bees too close lol, this made me smile.
love
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Dear Mari,
AHHH! I see you've done it.
That's my dutiful dewdrop daughter!!
XXX Dad.
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Oh yes dad, I forgot about it, well didn't forgot just wrote on a different place.
Thanks for reminding me
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Dear Mari.
Against the title of your poem, you MUST state, clear and plain,
the words: "NON-ENTRY" otherwise you'll get a lot of votes
and you might be the WINNER of this contest yet again!
which would contravene our system and create a lot of pain.
For, as you're contest host, those votes would be declared invalid
and the King would have to contact those whose votes were thus discounted
and, even though your song is long enough to be a ballad,
it's wrong if ants and bees (and even fleas) devour your salad.
Although it's Spring your thoughts take wing, I've got a certain hunch
that, with those bees and everything, you can't enjoy your lunch!
APPLAUSE for your beautiful second NON-ENTRY!
Love and hugs, from el padre. XXX Hugh (R.)
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well these give us the rites and wrongs of spring... the beauty of the flower in morning, the day comes alive with life, and the struggle to keep things we would rather not share with nature...like our outdoor lunch... this is really well done, brings a smile and a laugh... wonderful... PK
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"spring jewel
on the crown of a tulip
a dew drop"
oh, this one's my favorite, so beautiful, sure, i am still in 6 feet of snowbanks, and you're talking about Spring, gee, thanks, M. lol
beautiful...
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Hey, I'm warming you up with appetisers lol
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I love them alll---
but the "crown of a tulip"
holds my attention!
A charming trio,
so personal and bright!
M-C
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Thanks MC, it's my favourite imagery there too
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You of course know my favorite is three. Heck everyone knows that is my favorite, lol
You used the word critters! You are so my friend! lol
#1 is the most accomplished, I'm sure you agree with me there. I like the dew drop as a jewel, you are good at that stuff.
for using the word critter and a for the bees and the ants.
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You'd fight the ants and bees for that lunch, wouldn't you
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With every ounce in my body, you know I would!
I might even eat them if I was still hungry!
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LOL loud laughing here!
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Strident March and MC2-0-0-0 are wrong you know, it's the bee and ant one that capture the imagination. I've done that before, fought with bees for my lunch. It all seemed fine until this one bee started recruiting. I can beat two or three bees but when they gang up on me...I had to wave this tiny white flag (so they could see it) to announce my surrender. There went that baloney sandwich!
I need to work on my carnival poem/story.
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