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Dance Baby, Dance

 

Dance Baby, Dance

With chubby little cheeks and thighs
And saggy diapers hanging low
We danced beneath the moonlit skies
With chubby little cheeks and thighs
We never cared about our size
And never cared that we would grow
With chubby little cheeks and thighs
And saggy diapers hanging low

 

 

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Author notes

The prompt is to rewrite one of Kim’s poems.
Here is her poem: http://allpoetry.com/poem/4692715

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  • Paloszoo gold member
    March 5

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    This is adorable. Love the dancing baby! Always have. Nicely done! Thanks for entering my humble contest and for taking the time out to read and rewrite one of my poems. I appreciate it. Good luck!


  • nordicsky silver member
    February 25

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    It's strange how one word or phrase in a poem can conjure up ideas in our imaginations. The words saggy diapers made me think yuck, yuck, yuck; it conjured up memories of an explosion in a piccalilli factory and terrible smells.

    Thanks for the memory,
    Love, Peter


  • Legend silver member
    February 23

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    One more pleasurable trip to your wonderful wordy world. Disappointment is never in residence when i visit Excellent


  • echo-ink
    February 22

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    Yo Dudette, you finally found a dancin' partner for your avatar, YESSA!

    You did a fantastic job with this, BRAVO!

  • Papagallo
    February 22

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    A catchy tune in this poem. Made me want to get up and dance, I no longer have saggy diapers, but now I have baggy pants. Good luck in the contest. Papagallo


  • Cup-a-Joe
    February 22

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    Amera,

    Love what you did with the original poem. You are such a pro.

    Joe


  • Life is a Beach gold member
    February 21

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    Very cute! What is cuter than chubby babies dancing...saggy diapers and all! Good luck in the contest...lol...as if you need luck...you'z gots the talent!


  • HaleyMary
    February 21

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    Cute write, Amera. And, wonderful pic to go along with it. Best of luck in the contest.

    Haley Mary


  • Bedroom Eyes
    February 21

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    This is too cute lol! Dancing babies are a soft spot of mine since mine used to do it all the time

    Nice imagery from the Form Queen of AP.

    Best of luck in the contest!


  • Rovingone gold member
    February 21
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    Little dancing babies are always the cutest thing. You made the perfect picture. I loved it.


  • Denerica silver member
    February 21

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    LOL...I of course thought of the ones in nursing homes towards the end, like how we can even be wearing depends and dancing with chubby cheeks. Masterfully done rewrite. Blessings.


  • MJ Donnelly gold member
    February 21
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    LOL! Oh, this is precious!

    All the best hun, love ya!

    MJ.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    February 21

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    That would be Ali MacBeal's dancing Baby I think.

    It is very hard to make a triolet sound like poetry, and you seem to manage so effortlessly, wonderful

    J


  • penman gold member
    February 21
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    Wonderful

    Excellent as always. Such a masterful use of form. Best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    February 21

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    Sis,

    This really put a on my face! I love it! You did a great job on this one! I can see it all! (and am sure I will again, when I finally get that day care open) great job!

    Best of luck in this contest!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    February 21

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    wonderfully penned by the Queen of form. Enjoyed this.

    Best wishes in the contest


    Love
    Passions

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