The world is filled with pain and sorrow
But love it the light thats guilds our way
With that light the world doesnt seem so dark and cruel
Keep that light close because if it fades your world
Will be darker then you ever seen before
I had that light but it blew away now im alone
In this world all i have left is my pains and sorrows
The keep me from that light now i feel its to late
the light is gone like my soul like my heart i may never be whole
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its not much of a poem but it how life is through ppls eyes
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"I had that light but it blew away now im alone" I love this line. It portrays how we push those we love away and only then do we realise how alone and cold we are. This is a very emotional poem and I enjoyed it very much, however I would like you to proofread your poems first - you have a few grammatical errors. You have alot of talent and alot of potential so keep writing! I look forward to reading more
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Aw. this is really sad. I totally feel the emotion. Keep up the great work. Thanks so much for sharing.
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i think of a longlost friend who is no longer here. i know there is hope for anyone who doesn't let the light burn out, but why do they give up? why is it so deeply painful. this is a cry for help. it doesn't have to be this way.
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With out that light, the world does feel cold and dark, but, one must also take a lesson from the moth, and remember that such incandescence can burn greater than a thousand suns.
Thus the greatest thing in the world can also be the worst thing in the world.
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Welcome to Allpoetry
There is always hope.
Your words here show that there is light in life and when we reach the darkest point we may feel as though nothing can pull us through.
Poetically, try some punctuation to accentuate your piece.
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definate potential tho!
i like what you have penned here!
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