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The Stone (A Romance, Rough Draft)

The Stone (A Romance, Rough Draft, 1010 words)


He was a silent wanderer. He never settled down in a town for long before he had to move on. Dressed in rags, he made a poor first impression and townspeople were leery of his diffident nature.

He walked along the craggy roadway which carried travelers from Amethyst city to the Magnolia Gardens. It was just another day for him, another road, another place to rest his head before he grew restless, or until the locals grew wary of him.

So he walked, his head down, following the steps of his poorly cobbled shoes that kicked up small plumes of dust as he traveled. 

Darkness slowly crept around him and he feared he wouldn't make the city before dark. He hurried his step, not sure of the exact distance that he still had to travel.

His thoughts were on where he might find a meal, as payment for an hour or two of work. He never accepted handouts without repaying.

As he hurried along the gloomy roadway, he suddenly stumbled, and fell, skinning his knee. He winced for a moment, rubbing his knee, cursing the conditions of the highway. He looked back, to where he stumbled, for the cause of his upset, and he noticed a stone.

He rose gingerly from his sitting position, mumbling epithets at the slight pain in his knee. 

"Is that what caused me to fall? Just a drab, unassuming rock? he asked rhetorically. He picked it up and tossed it back and forth between his two hands. He looked for an object to toss it at, to strike, but then thought otherwise. The stone seemed interesting, he wasn't sure why, but he decided he'd keep it. "You just never know when a stone might come in handy" he reasoned.

He put the stone in the satchel he carried on his side and continued on his way.

His thoughts wandered through his past, remembering loved ones, that had all gone, those who had died or who had left him, but as he thought such melancholy memories, his mind averted back to the stone, it seemed something within the stone beckoned him, which of course was preposterous. There were no magical stones, any fool knew that!

As he walked with such motley thoughts, he suddenly heard in the distance a soft, but plaintive cry. He looked around but saw no one. Just trees and an opening to what seemed like a cave. He listened and again he heard the cry, which seemed to emanate from the cave.

He walked in the direction of the voice, concerned but unafraid, for the words sounded gentle, though sad.

Though it had become dark, he could still see a few feet within the cave, and as he peered closely, he saw, to his surprise, a woman, huddled within the cave, crying.

His first instinct was to walk away, after all, it was no business of his if a woman wanted to hide in a cave and cry her eyes out. For all he knew she deserved to be in that cave. Keep your nose out of others' affairs, that was his motto.

But near that uncaring exterior beat a heart like everyone else, and it went out to the woman, and so he stayed, and then spoke with some trepidation to the woman,

"Madam, are you ok? Do you need some assistance?"

The woman, looked up, alarmed, then wiped her tears and looked stoically at the man.

"Can you talk? Come out of the cave, it's no place for a woman, it's no place for anyone. Come out and we'll talk."

She seemed to hesitate, but then rose to her feet, her back lowered against the ceiling of the cave. He put his hand out, to help her from the cave, and she stood before him, a beautiful, dark haired, woman.

He looked at her closely, and even in the dark, he could see that she had green eyes, which she then averted from his gaze.

He asked her a few questions, but she would not or could not answer. She just looked away, avoiding his scrutiny.  Frustrated, he tried to think of a way to get through to her, or at least, entertain her. He thought of the stone. It seemed unusual to him, maybe she'll think the same. He took it out of his satchel and presented it before her.

At seeing the stone, her eyes grew wide, then tears began to form, and she spoke a single word, "No" when he offered it to her.

But he was persistent, and pushed the stone toward her, hoping she might be amused. She reluctantly took it, and held it disinterested. He frowned, "Well, that didn't work" he said, and put his hand out to take the stone. She passed it to him and for a brief moment both hands touched the stone simultaneously, and suddenly the stone, seemed to light up and then, open as if the two sides were attached to a hinge.

It was not a simple stone, but a geode, and inside the most brilliant colors shined, as if lit from within. He took his hand away in shock and the geode, faded, colorless. Naturally curious he put his hand back on the geode and it again lit up. She then took her hand away and the geode again, became black, and when she put it back, it lit up, and continued to be lit as long as they both touched it  at the same time.

He looked at her, and she, no longer shy, looked at him. They both smiled, not only at the spectacle of the geode, but for what they both knew that it portended.

Loyal readers of romances know the ending of this tale. I make no pretense that this story ends unpredictably.  They fell in love, they were married and they lived happily ever-after. And all of you Realists, familiar with my usual cynical style, if you look into your hearts, would you really want the ending to be any different?




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A sequel inspired by a story I read.

A rough draft. Any help with corrections is appreciated.

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  • waydownuponjoy
    October 24
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    I am ...

    messaging you with corrections ... as for the ending, well ... I'll just say that this tale is a fairy tale so it'll have to be in accordance with those endings but ... there seems to be much left out inbetween the sharing of the stone and the real lives of both of them. Too many thoughts left unanswered. joy


    • Yemassee gold member
      October 24
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      A friend was having a tough day and I felt her story had a far too cynical tone. Yeah, me see something TOO cynical? lol But I wrote the story in one quick sitting for I wanted her to read my little message as soon as possible. I wanted to show that people don't have to end up alone in a cave, that there is someone out there for everyone. And I mean that in terms of friendship, etc. Ok, I live in a cave myself, but I want to, lol
      Will fix the thingies you suggested now. Thanks.


      • waydownuponjoy
        October 24
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        the cave will always exist as a refuge from the storms and the geode as the light for inspiration. I do understand quick replies ... and have offered many as well. If we aren't moved to think beyond the norm when we read art, then we might as well just look at pictures of hearts! Thank you~ jy


        • Yemassee gold member
          October 24
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          Most people prefer the picture of hearts and Victorian drawings of cute little boys and girls innocently exchanging valentines...I have just made myself sick. (He says hypocritically knowing that his story is in that same vein.)


          • waydownuponjoy
            October 24

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            well now ... that explains the addition to your title "rough draft"!

            Cheer up old mate and take that Moxie and use it as an elixir for what ails ya ...

            I'm learning the art of public bubbin' but realize that it may be months before anyone stops by here to read all that we've shared!

            j *hugs* y


            • Yemassee gold member
              October 24

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              It matters not that people see our bubbin' since it only seems like genius to the two conversing.

              The hazard of writing fiction on a poetry site is that it doesn't get read often. Nor is it fair to expect it to be. I tried Storywrite but it's mainly just 13-16 year olds there and they write far too many vampire stories.


              • waydownuponjoy
                October 24
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                Yes, what do the youth know of romance? and that brings to mind the poem I just posted about "all saints day" or Festival of the Dead ... when we rediscover what it's all about is when we start grooming the grave instead of looking to suck blood!


  • emi
    February 25
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    I have no complaint with the ending!


    • Yemassee gold member
      February 25
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      Hi Emi

      It's a bit overly-sentimental but who cares. Sometimes you just have to be.


  • pixiestix gold member
    February 21
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    A beautiful story from start to finish Yem. Very much so.

    I wish I tripped over that geode instead of smoke...lol.

    Check "different" in the first para.

    • Yemassee gold member
      February 22
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      It isn't "different" it's "diffident" (to show modesty)

      • pixiestix gold member
        February 22
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        That will be my word of the day now


        • Yemassee gold member
          February 22
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          Reading old fiction I Learned all kinds of odd words. Unfortunately I never learned anything sensible


          • pixiestix gold member
            February 22

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            You do have quite the vocabulary. That's a good thing.

            Don't respond until I find my dictionary. I want to be ready


  • gaze
    February 21

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    Of course not! Only you'd want it to end differently, if you were reading something like that written by someone else and IF you were still in that most-cynical-man-in- earth mood. You have been very romantic lately, and that works very well on your writing. Whatever you feel these days, keep on feeling, it suits you, along with your insanity of course
    A stone is never just a stone and if it lights up at the touch of someone who have been hidden in a cave, then it certainly must be cherished.


    • Yemassee gold member
      February 21
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      It's more a romance in the traditional sense (A tale dealing with idealized events remote from everyday life) than it is about love. I added that at the end because, well, I wanted to and I was in a hurry to get it posted, but most of the story hopefully fit the definition I gave above.

      Hopefully I no longer write the other kind (A story dealing primarily with love)

      Yes, cynical Mayne would scoff at the unrealistic tones. But I'm hoping cynical Mayne understands that sometimes we have to be unrealistic so that the end justifies the means.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    February 21

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    Continuing----
    the rock---enhanced by the visual
    causes me to be preoccupied with it,
    wanting to feel its rough, recognizable texture,
    dare to be there to touch and see the lights inside.

    Very in the moment, Sir Yem!

    More applauds..........many more!!


  • Melodies
    February 21

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    A geode! I fancy rocks and recognized it from the picture... made me yearn to crack it open! Your story is beautiful and filled with metaphoric forecasting and final happiness, which is very pleasing to the reader. We hardly ever get a happy ending, ever, in real life where all is bitter sweet.


    • Yemassee gold member
      February 21
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      How sad. I mean your comment,

      ''We hardly ever get a happy ending, ever, in real life where all is bitter sweet.''

      The cynic in me wants to agree, but that little optimist that has been sticking his nose in wants to keep hoping that happy endings do happen.


      • Melodies
        February 21
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        I hope so, too! The seeds of all that ever lived go forth and pleasantly do give.


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    February 21
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    I read in rapt attention,
    fascinated with the rock,
    then thrilled with the brilliant lights
    and the implication of a happy ending!

    But the rock, as rough as he,
    an unassuming symbol for
    all that we overlook.

    Masterful!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Back with more...

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