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Inside the Lines





Mind inside mind
devouring
what each may find

Ego battling id
sparring
within the grid

Soul prying soul
revealing
essence the goal






Any day or night
reading
exchanging insight

Humanity unraveled
communicating
vast and unrivaled



Hand to hand
reaching
'cross land to sea to land

Uniquely contemporary
touching
via technology













Author notes

Prompt 1 Humanity (as revealed in internet connections)
Graphics: Aesthete2000

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  • UncleDunk gold member
    August 18

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    Your poetry is quite revealing
    Sparse of word, yet rife with feeling
    Full of wisdom, full of wit
    With a little snake that bites in it.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      August 20

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      No snakes here, but little pac man guys,
      munching away. Using the image reminds
      me of a professor conducting a class in
      self-hynpnosis (early 80s) telling how
      he used the process to defeat his
      cancer, also visulaizing little pac men
      devouring the bad cells. What the
      mind conceives...

  • sleepinglion
    June 20
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    This is beautiful, congratulations
    David


  • Daizee silver member
    April 24

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    mind inside mind devouring what each may find... I really related to this line. It's always a joy to see what people post and it's with eagerness that I wait. I can see by your comments that internet relationships is, indeed, a top all it's own with vast opinions. I really liked the way you've described how we intereact

    Love,
    Stacy

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      April 24
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      Hi, Stacy1

      It's the adventure, exploring a new writer,
      well, new, if it is the first time encountered.

      Words are more deeply interpreted
      when that is all one has from which to learn!

      Nice to see you here.
      I enjoyed the unique take on situations
      that I discovered on your page!

      M-C


  • FallingSideways silver member
    March 17
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    you nailed it


  • Sudo Nimh silver member
    March 16

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    this piece is so simple and so beautiful..paintings and poems both constructed with such elegant choices of words and lines..if i had to pick a favorite part, it would be this.."Soul prying soul
    revealing
    essence the goal"
    Your gentility and your grace shine through in all you write Aesthete..i am glad to know you.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      March 16
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      The "prying" part---rather what we do
      as we read the work of another,
      taking out our "line openers"
      to pop the cap, the lid, the meaning.

      Ah, C-J, thank you for the "shine through."
      Equally happy to have found the green letters
      on the page as well as the ever-changing avatar!!!

      Aes


  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    March 10

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    It is amazing what you learn from others over the net..Interesting enough is that we do get a real sense of the person to whom we are communicating with. Out of the abundance of the heart does the mouth speak....or fingers type....after all our hearts are the engine in which all our facilities are controlled. Spiritually speaking that is....

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      March 10
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      Yes, we listen with our eyes
      as the words speak fromn the page,
      the heart surely revealed!

      The inquiring mind has a veritable
      playground from which to learn here!

      Thanks for the insight, Troy.

      M-C


  • liltulip gold member
    February 27

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    this is quite nice

    i enjoyed the flow and word choices, with the pics in between, quite a lovely combination, thank you for sharing!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 28
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      Thank you, liltuulip, for readiing
      and taking note of your thoughts.

      Nice to meet you,

      M-C


  • ten thousand cicadas gold member
    February 25

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    Yes, an interesting connection you have made. I've often wondered about the internet phenomena and the "small world" it creates. People can attain this sort of interaction you describe like never before... except there is not the "face value" and I wonder what role that plays in the soul to soul connection. Years ago, people communicated via letter over periods of months, today the net over seconds. The connection is certain, and more instant, yet somehow i'm not sure if the connection is as "real" or not. People can and do become whoever they want to be over the net. So you often connect with their wanna be self which is not a true connection. I don't know... your poem made me wonder again about these things... as you see from the rambling, I've nowhere near decided what i think! But the poem was well done. I like the "short takes" at the beginning. Spare words but big thoughts... and the conclusion is one that only our generation (so far) can come to. It's a thing of wonder, for sure! Lots to think about. Beautifully done.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 25
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      As to making a decision,
      it appears that is best handled
      case by case, person by person, perhaps.
      In the format here there is so much more
      to rely on, poetic words, fictional tales,
      discussion back and forth to find the
      reality inside each contributor.

      As to "real," the persons we know best,
      that we chat with each day, know as much
      of our day to day acrivities, how we feel,
      how much we have to accomplish as
      those down the street, our nearby
      friends and family. We depend
      upon our intuition, for life
      is all about perception!

      Thank you for sharing thoughts!

      M-C


  • Summer52
    February 24
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    Sending you hugs, kisses and smiles
    from across the miles.

    From Summer with love, Mumsy.
    , and reaching you
    through internet connection.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 25
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      Summer, Summer, so good to see you here!!!!

      Was concerned, your long hours and all.
      Take note that the Valentine Jake pix
      were taken just for you and rockabye,
      his most special fans!!!!

      Take good care of you!!!

      • Summer52
        February 25

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        Thanks, Mumsy.

        Give my love to Jake, please.
        And thank you very much for the pic.
        Adorable Jake and Rockabye.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          February 25
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          Lest rockabye stop in and wonder about
          what we are saying-----"Sweetheart" is
          the name of the heart pup toy,
          while rockabye is a real person,
          a friend from the Betty board
          who also thinks Jake is a cutey!

          Jake is very perceptive.
          He knows he has fans!!!!!

          • Summer52
            February 25
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            lol... Oh... I'm so sorry, Mumsy... I thought the name of the pup toy is Rockabye.
            Okay, thanks again to ALL of you...much safer, eh?

            Love you, Mumsy. and

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              February 25
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              Just peeked at your page!
              I thought it was the 28th.
              Aaagghh, Jake and I are
              hours late. We will make up for that!!!


  • skilter
    February 24

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    Oh wow, I really enjoyed this! Great job, I thoroughly enjoyed the flow, sorry I have not been around much as of late. Hope you are well, take care!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 24
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      Skilter, so good to see you!!!

      Nice of you to visit!

      Doing pretty well! Hope you are doing grand!

      Thank you,

      M-C


  • waydownuponjoy
    February 22

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    The art of heart ...

    Linking lines like linking hands
    Thinking minds grasp new-wave bands;
    Come and go ~ with ease to please
    Leave behind that new-age squeeze!

    jy

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 22
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      Ah, joy,
      you carry the thought so well.

      Mr Id will take note of the poetic response, I am sure!

      Thank you for the poetic words.

      M-C


  • arafura gold member
    February 21
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    I enjoyed this very much. Great work!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 22
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      Speaking of reaching across the sea....

      Thank you for stopping by and reading, John!

      M-C


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    February 21

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    connecting, all around the globe

    for the first time first hand ability to know each other right at out fingertips

    sharing beneath the skin, essense of life

    this is unity

    I do love the way you have written this

    your creativity is showing my friend

    a delight to read

    God bless you...

     

     

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 21
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      Ah, Kathy, your words enhance the meaning,
      emphasize the nearness we all can share!

      Thank you so much for stopping in
      and sharing your insight!

      M-C


  • Denerica
    February 21
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    Described our present days of humanity with well written words. Blessings.


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 21
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      And would we have believed this,
      the convenience, the extent,
      even fifteen years ago?


  • Olivias Violin
    February 21
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    COOL!!


  • Mr Id
    February 21
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    FYI, I did check out the art- it's awesome as usual! ^^


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 21
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      Oh, good! We were still wondering
      just what was going on---trying to
      get around the problem!!

  • Mr Id
    February 21
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    Your vocabulary is varied and interesting and you utilise it in an unconventional way, which makes me really enjoy reading your stuff.

    'cross land to sea to land

    This is my favourite line, as it in the most unconventional and interesting, what with the contraction and repetition and all.

    Great stuff- thank you very much, I love it!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 21
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      Hey, Mr Id!

      Thank you for the careful read.
      I rather liked that line, too.

      To reach our circle of friends here
      we cross over many boundaries,
      continents and seas, sometimes
      crisscrossing multiple times
      as we carry on simultaneous
      conversations!

      M-C

      • Mr Id
        February 21
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        AH man, I love it when people reply in rhyme
        I should start too, I think it's peak time
        It's something unique to this site, that's for true
        It reminds me of rapping contests, wait that doesn't rhyme...



        That was fun.

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          February 21
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          Yay! That was fun!

          Sometimes the words just want to play,
          regardless what we plan to say;
          it's all part of the game,
          just fun, no seeking of fame!!!!

          A way to avoid being too serious!!


          • Mr Id
            February 21
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            Yeah, I s'pose that is the reason.

            Hadn't though of it like that before.

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              February 21
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              The experience should be fun,
              as I see it, at least enjoyable.
              While we may have concern
              how our words appear as printable,
              when we enter a piece on the page,
              we can be less formal, or even abnormal
              when we exchange replies more fun than sage!!

              OK, now I've overdone it! Hah!!!

              • Mr Id
                February 21

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                I don't think there is such thing as overdoing it in this game, silly!

                Sorry I didn't reply in turn- I have worked today (be it only 3 hours) and I have written a lot of prose and poetry (by my standards), so I am all creativitied out!

                I like the last line of your comment-poem! ^^

                • Aesthete2000 gold member
                  February 21
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                  My brain needs to go to bed,
                  for I am a day sleeper, or night owl,
                  whichever explains, and I am up way to late in the day.
                  (Central time, USA.)

                  Nice to exchange thoughts!

                  G'nite.


  • Yemassee gold member
    February 21

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    I've found a lot of humanity in internet conversation. I've found a lot in the silence between the conversations.

    It can indeed be devouring. There are poets here, you are one, who I can swallow large amounts of their words, meanings, and sensibilities.

    The internet is a great thing, it's all that society is, all the good, all the bad, and all the gray areas. People like you, and hopefully me, strive for the good, spit out the bad.


  • pixiestix gold member
    February 21

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    I really like how you've included an acrostic poem within in the graphics to make this piece a "twofer".

    Modern means of communication have erased lines that we formerly stood on or behind. It still amazes me when I think about the geographics locations of all the people are that I've met through the internet.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 21
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      Hi, pix!

      When I created the "towers" piece on my front page
      I imagined how far apart, yet how near we can be,
      not only cross country but across the sea!

      I was still playing with the two "smiley" faces, as in
      devouring content, mind inside mind, just adding
      them at the end.

      I can remember grade school, a "pen pal" in Europe---
      thought that was so exciting!

      Glad you liked the "LINES" graphic. Had the darnedest time getting it to scan.

      Thanks for stopping in and sharing thoughts!

      Aes

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