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Dusk

You peeked at me
through the mountains
and filled the sky
with crimson sweetness.
I watched as you
bade goodbye and
wondered if you
felt the same way.
Did you hide the tears
as you slowly concede
to the moon who would
take over you tonight?
Did you smile and beam
as you looked at me
though your heart
bleeds inside?
Oh, Mr. Sun tell me
your secret. Tell me
how to keep the serenity.
I need to know
how to smile
and stop weeping
for the empty heart,
every time I see you
set in the horizon.

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  • GeorgiaRain
    February 21

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    Your use of imagery is stunning. I loved this piece. The contrast between the scale of the sun and of the one entity watching it set, with no power whatsoever, floors me. Great write!