Cadaver and Alabaster in the night sky,
thousand strings of light in thunder,
eight silver bells,
nine willow nests,
ten laughing demons...
imprison the womb
and corrupt the clouds.
Author notes
As with "Celestial Charade" this is somewhat experimental and is not to be considered as traditional poetry with a certain meaning.
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This is quite interesting and different to read. Digesting meaning and thought process seem to be more inclined to a general feel for the words rather than direct meanings, but different from abstract.
Good to see experimentation with words. They are truly magic at times.
I liked this. ~Pamela
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Thank you! I think I have plenty more of those in me to experiment with. I am glad it is received well.
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It is a piece that brings the desire for more...
I felt it as a stirring whisper of something omnipotent, something balanced between the
worlds. The dual negative at the end somewhat defeats that premise though, not being balanced
by something a bit positive.
Here's what I catch:
thousand strings (strings being abstract for bindings-negative) of light in thunder, (light, positive)
eight silver bells,
(bells are what call the white spirits in, positive)
nine willow nests,
(willow denotes sorrow, nests can be barren (negative)
ten laughing demons...
(nothing but negative)
And of course, your opening presents dark as Cadaver and light as Alabaster setting a certain
stage. I hope this review helps give you a defined inkling of what this imagery might say. Blue
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Hah, I never looked at it that way... I just penned the words and didn't ponder much on the symbolism, just the feeling they evoked, but this is brilliant. I need one more line a bit of rewording to make it happen in that manner, which is really breath taking. Thank you.
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