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Wishing you were here,
or I there…
So I could wrap, unwrap, then
wrap you up again.
A little tighter each time.
Feeling like a poison,
but please...
drink of me anyway.
Splay your palms and explore,
seek the sultry vision
thats yours, (ours)
for this moment...
...torment yourself
deep then deeper… in dreams
secluded in me.
...
A contest entry
- For Dalaney by tara wilson.
6000 points, ended March 10, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I see you still write great heat. Loking foreward to sharing words soon.
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seek the sultry vision
What a beautiful line...
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Pore me a cup of that. Very good as usual. I love your poems.
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Very good
nice flow and emotion
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excellent~
Penned just perfect for wanting to be love and the struggle that goes along with it
Best of luck in the contest
Hugs
Your sis
Siusan~~~
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Very well done!!!!! Beautiful in that inner stuggle to be loved and to share love.
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Great! I love this. Love the second stanza. And the feeling like a poison but drink of me anyway. I get that and I love that
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Works for me. I have melted.. so just pour me into a cup.
vice versa as well
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"So I could wrap, unwrap, then
wrap you up again.
A little tighter each time."
i love these lines....i think this is a really beautiful sensual poem, and there is a little bit of a danger felt as well, with the words poison and torment in it...thanks so much for entering the contest.
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Wow.. that is just stunning! Lane will love it I am sure!
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I've been poisoned by your sensuality and I thank you. I will sip from your cup always.
Love
PaPa
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Dream quality poetry, with a hint of sultry night...lovely poison indeed!
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This is truly beautiful! It's sensuous and visual. This is a poem that makes the reader read it several times just because it's so lovely.
Love,
Amera♥
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Very well written. The first time I read it I kept thinking of a bottle of 12 year old scotch. But I am old and easily confused. Good write.
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Beautifully sensual...
Love the Words you toss around in this exellent piece of poetry.
Very impressive, love the Title
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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"Feeling like a poison,
but please...
drink of me anyway. "
Always living on the edge, feeling adventure...
great job
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I can survive torment!! Pick me, pick me!! Little Shrek there to take the edge off... If I wasn't dog-sitting for my neice, hmmmmm.
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this is just lovely
I am sure she will love it
Juls
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Oh she will adore this from you C
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