A Musing by Justified Inc. at All poetry

Amid a frozen cluster of grapes,

I have identified my muse of late.

Hanging on a perpetual seed in time,
dangling and solidified on the vine.

Apt to lose the flavor of my declining savor,
clinging mischievously to the naked arbor
of my mind.

In an embarrassing exhibition
of unfruitful mockery.

Author notes

prompt- frozen grapes (make it funny)

I have an odd sense of humor, I know.
Feel free to delete if it is not within the parameters of your contest! I won't get my feelers hurt.

A contest entry

Funny...Deadly.. by Lady Michaella. 475 points, ended March 2, 2009, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest

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machiavel
April 1, 2009

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i like this; it's a dry sort of humour, which i like, and usually i don't like humour pieces on here because they're usually bawdy or just bad. your piece is refreshing, to say the least! oh, and the pseudo-rhymed lines in this were good, especially between 'savour' and 'flavour' - also an interesting twist to have the poem formatted the way you did. i did think you had one adjective too many in the final stanza and that maybe it would sound more succinct as just 'in an exhibition / of unfruitful mockery.' love 'unfruitful,' too!

awesome. good work!

-endymion
- Justified Inc.
  April 1, 2009
  
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  Thank you Endymion!!!!
  Well, that was so nice of you to return the favor and comment!
  I will have to agree with you on that one adjective too many!
  lol, I will have to re-edit this one!
  Thanks again! It's nice to have some fresh eyes, when one has gone over something one too many times!
  I tend to begin to want to throw the whole thing out! lol
  Justified Inc.
- - machiavel
    April 1, 2009
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    no problem! i get like that too... i feel like going outside and burning my poem-in-progress right now
MJ Donnelly
March 27, 2009
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Oh, very soulful, and I've felt this way many times.

Love,
mj.
kdom
March 23, 2009
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This was great. I enjoyed it!
- Justified Inc.
  March 25, 2009
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  Thanks kdom.
  Appreciate your reading and commenting.
  Annette
Comatose--X
March 1, 2009
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*chuckles* That was interesting. I would take my hat off to you.. yet im not wearing one. . Very nice poen it made me laugh, oddly. Although im not sure thats what you meant to do. I read it over twice and each time i read it the clearer it becomes. Very nice job.

Ashley
- Justified Inc.
  March 1, 2009
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  Thanks Ashley.
  Yeah, this came from a strange place and it was meant to be humorous...although I'm not sure from what type of humor! lol.
  Dry? Ironic perhaps?
  he he,
  thanks for reading it!
  Annette
Lady Michaella
February 25, 2009

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oo!! this is great... very well written.. really good job.. and no, i think its funny :P

Great take on the prompt!

Thanks for entering my contest,

and best luck to you!

your judge,

-Lemon Bee-

xx
artis
February 23, 2009

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love this iced whine about your
empty cup of inspiration. I have sucked air from bottled up emotions of my own, and missed the sweetness of that frozen moment in time when poets bear fruit. lovely write.~~~Artis
Beauty Of Silence
February 21, 2009

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AAAHAHAHHAHAA

auntie, u do have an odd sense of humor. thats exactly whyy i get your jokes. lol i'm wierd too! anyhoo, this was well written, love the flow and i lvoe poems that make me think and laugh in the end this did it all for me! loved it, and the background is pure awesomeness! simple and striking!
- Justified Inc.
  February 21, 2009
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  That is why I love you Beauty!
  You always make me laugh! I think we were destined to find each other on AP!
  Love to you!
  Auntie Justified