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Pandora's Box

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              black ebony box
     all trimmed in gold- could only
            be holding treasure


Eluard

as vapors of mercury upon burnished silver

freeze Paris on a tin-type photo
clear
vivid
never to fade
so the poet's words are cast
like iron beams of the Eiffel Tower
stark
standing in daylight
reaching out to generations

even if all the paradigms are sleeping on their heads
and the lines between daylight and dreams
have become uncertain



             

            reaching to kiss me-
      I am transfixed by the moonlight
             in this woman's eyes


Gala

you are not beautiful
you are fabulous
you are satin silk mink and pearls
now I know why the ancients believed Aphrodite was born from the sea
a primal force of life rising forth from a shell
(a living jewel-box of stone soft as skin
painted with dawn's gentlest watercolours)

I am washed in the salt of a thousand rivers
their foam rushes around my ears



               

                 cedar cigar box
           no matter that it's empty
            -scent of wood and leaf


Dali

the cropologist
creeping through the belly and the entrails of the earth
looking for the perfect fossilized turd
his quest
his grail
that Tyrannosaurus Rex "flop"
that has petrified into opal
he longs to bring it out
to show the world how its blood red flecks
transform into fire in the sunlight

he is a huckster , a trickster
he is a liar, a plagiarist
selling pterodactyl guano
passing it off for gold
but on the early morning valley plain
where dawn mists are gilding heaven and earth
no one can tell the difference








Author notes

prompt: Salvador Dali and Jeff Buckley
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=fovX6xGlJE8


Art: Movie Poster from Georg Wilhelm Pabst's "Pandora's Box"
starring Louise Brooks, 1929.

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  • rinzurajan
    November 15
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    definitely deserved the gold...

    i loved the earthiness in ur words....

    good luck


  • Ethereal One gold member
    March 27

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    excellent!

    I really enjoyed reading this. I can see why it won a Gold trophy!
    Very creative, and you know your artists, and haiku very well.

    Jeannette


  • tinuelena
    March 2
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    earthly and delicious. Well-deserving of the gold. Bravo.

  • Thank you for this entry in the contest. I like the focus in the first stanza - then I'm looking at those wonderful pics of the Surrealists, you've made me see Tristan Tzara as well as Elouard and Breton. So, exploding the art world was done differently by each exponent.

    I like your contrast between Gala ' (a living jewel-box of stone soft as skin
    painted with dawn's gentlest watercolours)

    and Dali 'he is a huckster , a trickster
    he is a liar, a plagiarist
    selling pterodactyl guano
    passing it off for gold'

    and the summing up of your final line.


    • DogFish silver member
      March 2
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      Thanks for hosting this contest, Mercedes, it was a lot of fun. Ireally enjoyed the other entries: how can Dali not excite the lunatic side of anyone?! I really liked "just rob's" poem, I think his stood out for me. I thank you for honouring my little collection of verse with a trophy!

      • I really liked Just Rob's poem too. I hate judging contests. Next time I'll get a co-judge. Or an independent judging panel. I could pay for them with points. But I think this poem would still win.

        • DogFish silver member
          March 2
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          Yes! As much fun as it is to chose a subject and see how others respond to it...it is often hard to chose one over the other as "best".
          A co-judge is a good idea if one wants to spread the guilt and doubt!!


  • deercatcher
    February 22
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    Enjoyed.


  • arafura gold member
    February 22
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    But does he know shit from clay? I enjoyed the read!


  • Naughtygrlred
    February 21
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    bravo


  • Cannonsfire
    February 20

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    This is fabulous, so many things you can visualize in this and dive into with your metaphors. Loved it C

    • DogFish silver member
      February 20
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      You're quick of the mark with you're new poems but you're quick of the mark with your comments,too!

      Thank's for your encouraging words!

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