There Is No Love
"There is no love." she whispered, crying softly in my ear.
"There's only hate. There's only pain. There's only primal fear."
Her tears fell on my shoulder as she trembled in her pain.
No love. Imagine! I cannot. I told her, "Think again.
It's love that drove you down to this. It's love that makes you cry.
It's love that tears your heart apart and makes you want to die.
Without the love, it's plain to see, your parting would not hurt.
You would not moan and wail so. You wouldn't feel like dirt.
Now what is hate but soured love? If never you had cared
This good-bye would not hurt you so. You'd scoff at what you've shared."
She said, "You're right. Yes, there was love. His leaving hurts me so,
And just because he's walked away won't mean all love must go.
She held me tighter; kissed me then and looked into my eyes.
I kissed her back and stroked her skin. Oh blissful sweet surprise.
"There's only love." she whisperd then. "There's only love." I said.
Then no more words, just sweet, sweet thoughts that rustled on the bed.
Author notes
There's only hate, there's only tears, there's only pain, there is no love here.
A contest entry
- There's only hate, there's only tears, there's only pain, there is no love here. So what will you do? by Jaffa-.
700 points, ended February 26, 2009, 27 entries
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Suberb Poetry!
Larry, This was awesome! Perfect rhyme, flow imagery. Great from beginning to end. The ending made me smile .....Loved It!
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""There's only love." she whisperd then. "There's only love." I said.
Then no more words, just sweet, sweet thoughts that rustled on the bed."
WOW!!! I've certainly been in this place before. Again, what great use of meter rhyme and wording
Ruth
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Thanks.
Perhaps you could explain traditional poetry to the author of this contest. She thinks it is in a story format. I'm flabberghasted.
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I really liked this write. I think it would really improve the flow if you split it up into smaller lines, like in a poetry format instead of a story format?
I really liked the idea behind this write. That there is still love even though all that comes out of it is hate, pain and tears. very well done and thank you for the entry ox -
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As the other comment notes
saying "what great use of meter rhyme and wording" it is a good write in a traditional poetry format.
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