You only want someone to see you,
to wipe away your tears,
the ones you cry when you're hurt.
You just want something to hold on to.
This place isn't secure for you,
you're sure of it.
You should leave,
you know that you should,
home is where your heart is.
This doesn't seem like a home to you,
so where's your heart?
Stop faking your happiness and run.
Everyday you cry,
you sob and sob,
"I want something new," you whisper,
as your drunken father screams at your mother,
they're at it again...
You just want a place you can call home.
You sit in your room,
the door locked tightly,
you're afraid to come out.
You will be blamed,
you will be punished,
for crimes you didn't commit.
Does this really feel like home to you?
The fighting and the tears,
you can't just say it never happened.
You want to escape and never come back.
You need a break in this routine.
Keep wishing for this to work,
but what will you do when all your stars are gone?
What will you wish on then?
This isn't a home...
Author notes
Nothing personal. =) I'm proud of this poem, my writting has changed diffentenly! =D Anyhoo, this came to me when I was thinking about some of the things kids have to go through. Abuse, drunken parents, no parents, no home; stuff like that. So I wrote this. I'm not sure the emotion came out enough, but I tried. Thank you for reading.
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you should be very proud of this poem!!
again as i read i can feel the pain this little one is going through, you have written a very well presented and vivid read,
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thank you very much(:
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Wow. So many emotions in this poem. I really enjoyed the read. Thanks for sharing.
Love,
Ylova
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:]] ty for the comment.
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Good poem, Audrey!
I certainly hope it's true that this isn't your life, that you're just describing what other kids go through. You're too nice a person to have this in your background for real.
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This was a write that hits close to home here. You expressed many things that does happen to a lot of kids in some homes and I praise you. The poem here you wrote showed much of the emotion kids do feel in this type of situation. So Kudos to you ^^ I loved the write. It was a very good read. Lines 19-29 were especially written well and tell a story loads of people can relate to.
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ahh I see :/. And thank you very much. :}
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Great job!! You totally expressed the feelings and situation well in your writing, and its even better that you wrote it so well without having to actually go through it. Keep writing ya, Cheers!!
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mmm thankies.
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So sad that kids have to go through these things. I think you captured the emotion well.
Well done,
Justified Inc.
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yeah :/. Thank yooou.
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This one has a lot of emotion and a VERY strong sense of urgency. Great write, the wording was good and the line breaks were perfect for the feel of this poem. I just have one suggestion: In the first stanza, maybe change "This doesn't feel like a home to you," to "Does this feel like a home to you?" Just a thought; that question helped the sense of urgency and despair and it seems like asking it twice would work well in the poem. That was the only thing that stuck out was that that statement came and then you restated it in a question. Otherwise, GREAT WRITE. I'm serious, I've never read so much urgency in your poetry. I absolutely HAD to finish it, I couldn't pull away
-Odyssey
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aww thank you very much. :]
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this shows a lot of emotion in it. It was an excellent poem i loved the whole entire poem way to go
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thankies. xoxo
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