Taking her by the hair
tryed to catch his stare
Nothing special just
another victim
Soon to be stabbing her flesh some where
not known her screams
make him proud
he loves them loud
He finds a perfect ground, She screams
so loud deep inside ground
Cring and grouping & moaning
fighting & kicking yet
hes still hungry for screams
He leaves her for dead
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What did you think? What are your thoughts on this poem?
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Oh wow that was dark and intense! I watched a film about a serial killer the other night and this could have been written about him! Wow, liked it.
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This was
cute
really
very cute
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Nightmares can be very intense, this is a living nightmare, very Myra Hindley ish. Horror! Scarry! and thrilling ! wondeful... thank you.
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Such a dark piece, full of vivid imagery.
Thank you for sharing.
Gaylene
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Oh wow. Very dark write. Gave me chills reading it.
I think you did a great job of getting what you wanted to say out without making this a book! Great write! -
deep dark write full of imagery...
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Wonderful
Such a terrific write. So very well done. Thank you for sharing
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This is a very dark and horrific poem. I like it. it seemed to me to be a portrayal of the mind and thoughts of a serial killer. The only recommendation that I have is to check the spelling closely. The thoughts are vivid and the story is well told.
Nicely done.
Mike
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"her screams make him proud he loves them loud" deep sentence.
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Very dark...sad and at the same time, full of imagery. Not sure if this is about rape-to-murder or pure dark-fantasy; but on the chance that it's based in reality, it sounds like the character is grusomely 'enjoying' a sick person's morbid fantasy. Hard to read through all of the portrayal of pain. Captured so vividly, so graphically by your pen.
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Oh my this is a sad, dark piece. You made the images so vivid with your words.
Gaylene
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Thanks for commenting this
poem
I will change it to victim
thanks for telling me
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very dark
and the imagery is superb .. though i think victim is the proper spelling ... other than that this is a great write
~teddybare~
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Oh my goodness
What a wicked write this is ooooo it sure did give me chills down my back .
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