Upon sunder billow and mountain high
of bristle on the shore,
the dawn of bliss and fainted sigh;
a sound I've heard before.
Wistful eyes so colored blue
reflect the waning storm,
down the rain of shining dew
into the light of morn.
The blades of grass against my finger
are long as they are thin,
and scents of strawberry patches linger
cold against my skin.
Lilies bound in roots to bloom
in mud so soon to harden,
I ponder clouds approaching gloom
in fields within my garden.
Author notes
I picked Options: Pictures
10. http://www.davidadamsonline.com/images/pg_tiger_lily_fairy_1.jpg
It made me think of fantasy and how I wish to live in a world that is only imaginary.
I really loooove all the song choices [as we've talked about already] but I was already writing this naturey kind of poem. I'm not one for rhyming but this seemed to flow so well in my skin it had to be written. 
A contest entry
- Options: New Poems! by Stormy Days.
650 points, ended March 5, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Can I walk through your garden?
This was really good, the rhyme wasn't forced in anyway. It flowed smoothly. Like all your writes it was good....you stupid stupid person you. lol You're making mine look like 3rd grader shiz! -
I am so jealous.
That just flowed so perfectly in sync, both in rhyme and rhythm. For me, rhyming is tougher to do than getting ready for a root canal. When I do it, sometimes it feels forced, but that just doesn't exist at all with this piece. For someone who says that she's not one for rhyme, you sure do it well. The first stanza is fantastic, and it just continued on that path until the end. I love to read a poem that hits on all five senses like this one does.
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haha, I've always wanted my house to be exactly the way I want it. Unfortunately I'm lacking the wealth to do so. Great write.
Josh
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lol makes me wish there were little faries wondering around in my garden or at least some fisty Nombes lol. I love your discreptiveness (if that's even a word). You did an excellent job on this.
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Beautiful words creating lovely imagery. Excellent...mal
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Beautiful, Kerri. Wow, everytime I read one of ur poems i have a new fave, lol. The last stanza is my favorite. <333
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aww same to you demi :]
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The art of words!
You have painted such a vivid picture with this poem. I felt like I could see ur garden.
"Wistful eyes so colored blue
reflect the waning storm,
down the rain of shining dew
into the light of morn."
was my favourite stanza.
I am floored by how good this piece is.
Very well done.
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the imagery in this is quite fantastic. you painted a picture that was unveiled as i read your words. thank you for sharing this with me today and i wish you the best of luck in this contest taht you have entered. i am looking ofrward to reading more from you in the near future. viyanna rosemarie
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Holy Cow!
This was so wonderful.
i adore the rhyming
hell i just adore this all together,
i love the choice of words used
and i love the nature theme
the flow is amazing.
i think this just might be my favorite poem written by you. i can just close my eyes and picture all you have described in the poem.
p.s. lilies are my favorite flow
ily wifey.
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I like this a lot.
Especially the rhyming. You're right, I don't think this would have worked well in freeverse. Great piece, and you'd better win, or at least place. -
Superb
A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm, and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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I love it, straight simple, and to the point Excellent work here
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The last stanza was says it all. You write from your soul with nicely written imagery. For being so young you have given alot of thought with alot of creatively.
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You're amazing.
you are so talented. This sent a shiver down my spine. -
Holy Pancakes!
Kerri...you write such beautiful poems...you're ryme and meter is amazing! Never does it ever sound forced and it all flows so well. You have an idea and you stick to it till the end.
I really enjoied this piece..it was soothing and it calmed me was I read it. Very relaxing piece.
this is surely one of my favorite poems on this entire site.
very well done,
-Dusty-
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I Love the first and last stanza's they are my favorites I love how it rhymes a very interesting take on the picture you chose I love the way it flows as if moving with nature
~GOOD LUCK!~
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the flow was perfect. And so was the imagery. I loved this. I'm in love with nature so this really kind of related to me. Kerbosh this was a great write and I'm still in love with the imagery. Great job. Oh, and the flow was perfect and the rhyme just rolled off the tongue. Nicely penned
Josh
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