In the blackened depths she waited,
As eternity slowly passed.
Watching behind expectant eyes,
Concealed in her prison of bast.
A familiar face she espied,
One she’d watched with fascination.
Yearning for just one passing glance,
From her hearts true adoration.
Though in a rush, he paused briefly,
At the foot of her arbor cell,
To grasp a scarlet red apple,
Within which her spirit did dwell.
Longings sent her heart aflutter,
As he prepared to take a bite.
Time stood in painful suspension,
Confinement’s end at last in sight.
Upon his first taste of sweet fruit,
Her leaden shackles slipped away.
From her confinement now released,
Into the dawn of her first day.
Astonished eyes took in her form,
Materialized from thin air.
A smile spread across her soft lips,
In breathless awe he could but stare.
“My Love, I’ve watched you for so long,
Waiting for the day to arrive,
When you would free me from my keep,
And my lifeless form you’d revive.
“Now I will be forever yours,
Bound to your heart by love undead.
Fate has brought us together, Dear,
Our journey now lies just ahead.”
It was love at first sight, he knew,
As destiny had declared.
He drew her into warm embrace,
Their two lives as one to be shared.
Author notes
A Valentine poem written for my beloved fiance. Based on two characters we created and want to write a story/graphic novel about. The basic story of the characters is that the girl, Spooky, is dead, and her soul is trapped in a tree growing in a cemetery. The boy, soon to be called Ghoul, passes the cemetery every day on his way to school. One day, he is running late and had to skip breakfast, and so grabs an apple from Spooky's tree. Upon eating the apple, he releases Spooky, who is then bound to him for eternity. As the story progresses, he becomes like her and is called Ghoul, and their love grows. A basic story line for now, but a good idea none-the-less. Thanks to my fiance, EveofAbyss, for providing the story line 
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beautiful poem
the idea that you guys had sounds really cool, I hope you come to publish it someday ^ ^
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thank you! i'm glad you like the idea of the story, and i'll be sure to post more when we get it going ^.^
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very nice
I'm sure the story will be a good one. I like it so far and hope that you get it done soon. Good luck and I hope you have a great day, The Shaker
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thanks for the comment! i'm glad you liked it ^.^
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this poem was good i like the ways you broke you lines up and the words you use. looks to me like you put a lot of though into the way you would break it up the way you would use the words you did, and if you ever write the story please tell me because i would read it! most stories and or poems begin with a simple idead then develope into something more complex. it's good that you have confidence in you idea. Good luck. =D
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thank you! i'm excited to get the story going, and thank you for your encouragement ^.^ i'll be sure to post anything we get going when we start it!
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oh this was really good I really loved the story line here
.. in some places the rhyme seemed a bit forced, but not too much not enough to make the reader not like this write .. but anyway!!! I truly loved it.. I wish you both luck with your story.. I'm sure that when you two get started and have post it or print it.. many people will love it ..
Angel
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thanks so much for your comment! i'm glad you liked the poem ^.^ i tend to have a harder time with rhyming, but i'm glad it doesn't seem too forced. thanks again!
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Your poem is good
its better than good
its great its greater
than thats FANfknTASTIC!!!!!
well done
hope to see more
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thanks so much! i'm glad you like it ^.^ i'll be sure to post more as we work on the story more >.O
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Yay, Spooky and Ghoul are now in poetic form! I love the way you described the story, hun. It's full of beautiful imagery, and every image and scene is charged with emotion. It's very beautiful and I really can't wait to see this story worked on further.
Great writing, hun! Now keep going. ^_^
~G~
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thanks, love ^.^ i'm glad you like it, and i look forward to working with you on making our graphic novel >.O
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