My love is not of average stock,
Not wont to wend amidst the flock
That nay and bray in fretting frock;
She comes of regal breed.
From whence emerged that porcelain brow,
The supple form that silks allow
And hair that phoenix flames endow,
Also came Aphrodite’s steed.
Without compare She glides aloft,
Of beauty bright and pallor soft,
And as She passes flora waft
With desire to graze those feet.
When moonlight casts its famous glow
And bathes in waves terrain below,
Awe in me no more does grow;
My love holds greater seat.
Her eyes are wells where amber flirts
With emerald petals, rippling skirts
That wreathe the rift wherein old hurts
Are lost to beauty’s charms.
A window there through which does gleam
The love elusive, save in dream,
But blessings many! Note the theme!
She chose to dwell in my arms.
Could you tell what this poem was about?
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I love the the first four lines of the last stanza. That vision of "emerald petals, rippling skirts / That wreathe the rift wherein old hurts / Are lost to beauty's charms"...that is some intense imagery. I also love the clever way you've ended the poem. The entire thing though is beautiful in its archaic tenor...You are an excellent writer.
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Thank you for taking the time to read this, and leaving such a great critique and comment. I'm glad you enjoyed it! ^_^ Comments like yours are always very welcome, I'm happy to see there are still people who enjoy the archaic and classical styles of poetry. Thanks again, and I look forward to reading some of your work soon, as well!
~G~
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This is gorgeous. It is so refreshing to read your work again.
I've been away from poetry too long, and this was a fabulous way to return.
The lady mentioned is lucky indeed to have such lovely things written about her...
~ Muriel
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Thanks, Muriel! I'm glad you like the poem and it is great to have you around again. ^_^
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Very well done, poet. Some really good phrasing here.
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this is outstanding! i love the vivid imagery, as well as the strong emotion that's very evident in your poem. love it!
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The way you wrote
this is so good!
Ur a great poet"
well done ....
xoXO/
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Thanks for the comment! Glad you like the poem. ^_^
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great poem, my love! thank you so much for writing it ^.^ i love the imagery and descriptions, they are so rich and vivid. the rhyme scheme is really great, different than what you normally use; i love it, and i like to see you use different techniques. overall a beautiful poem, and i am really flattered to know it's about me ^.^ thank you again, love, you are amazing!
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