Love watches cascading, salty waterfalls
and she is face down, naked, floating
in pools of honest waters.
Words escaping with every
air bubble; thoughts concealed
by destruction and the sound of
pebbles against the water’s floor.
She is far from the living, but
won't leave just yet;
"you are my pulse."
Author notes
1) Break a heart - write a poem about loss, can be lost love, loss of someone near you, or even a pet.
Inspiration : I lost a boy, and it's hard to let him go.
A contest entry
- Lots of Options by A-muse-in-writer.
2300 points, ended March 6, 2009, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Good job:
Very deep.
I like how the poem flowed.
It's really jam packed with raw emotions.
Good job.
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Well done
Fantastic imagery, can see how deeply this hurts you but I think most people have been hurt by another person, letting go is one of the hardest things to do. I should know as I had to let someone go too, it was not easy but sometimes love isn't easy and if that is what is asked and you love that person than it is the only thing to do. still it does hurt. Well conveyed and nicely written.
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